Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear, relevant and includes a personal detail, but it could be more concise and natural. Use one strong topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g. "I had a bike when I was a child" and repeating age unnecessarily) and try varied vocabulary (e.g. "ride" → "cycle").

例: Yes. My parents bought me a bike when I was eight, and I cycled to the park every weekend with my friends. As a result, I became more confident and independent because I learned to navigate streets and meet new people on my own.

提案: The idea is relevant but the answer is short, repetitive and lacks specific supporting details and linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a reason and an example or brief comparison. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g. "widely used" or "common") and avoid filler phrases like "a lot of people that are."

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and errands. For instance, commuters often cycle to work in city centres where traffic and parking are difficult, and students frequently use bikes to travel to school.

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because there are a lot of people that are using their bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in our country because there are a lot of people who use their bikes.

The relative pronoun 'that' is commonly used for things; for people 'who' is more appropriate (Incorrect use of pronouns/adjective type but fits 'Singular and plural issue' instruction to choose from list). Also, 'are using' (present continuous) is less natural for habitual action; 'use' (simple present) correctly matches the general statement about popularity. Suggestion: use 'who' for people and simple present for habitual facts: 'people who use their bikes'.