Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, concise and correct grammatical errors. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant comments. For example, correct pronunciation of key verbs (ride/rode) and clear ownership information. Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I learned to ride my first bike when I was about five or six years old, although it actually belonged to my cousin. After that I rode every day around the neighborhood, which helped me become confident and independent.

提案: Use accurate nouns and verbs, reduce filler words, and organise ideas with linking phrases (e.g., 'mainly', 'however'). Provide specific examples or comparisons to support your view. Keep answers natural and no longer than five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular, especially among children who often ride them for fun around their neighborhood. They are not widely used for daily transport in cities; instead, adults tend to use bicycles mainly for exercise or leisure at parks and bike paths.

× Yes, I write.

✓ Yes, I did.

The student used the base form 'write' incorrectly when answering a past question. The examiner asked about the past ('Did you have'), so the correct short affirmative response uses the auxiliary 'did' plus base or simply 'Yes, I did.' Use 'did' to refer to past actions and avoid base present verbs in isolation.

× I rode a bike when I was a kid a lot.

✓ I rode a bike a lot when I was a kid.

The sentence uses correct past tense verb 'rode' but the adverbial phrase 'a lot' is placed awkwardly. Move 'a lot' next to the verb to make the sentence more natural: 'I rode a bike a lot when I was a kid.' Maintain past tense for the time reference.

× So I remember that the first bike I rode was when I was around maybe 6 or no I think 5 or 6 years old.

✓ I remember that the first bike I rode was when I was around five or six years old.

The original mixes hesitations and duplicate time expressions ('around maybe 6 or no I think 5 or 6 years old'), causing poor structure. Remove filler words and choose one clear age expression. Use numerals spelled out in formal speech: 'five or six years old.' Keep past tense 'rode' and 'was.'

× So it was not my.

✓ So it was not mine.

The student used the subject possessive 'my' instead of the correct possessive pronoun 'mine' at the end of the clause. Use 'mine' when the possessive stands alone without a following noun: 'It was not mine.'

× Yes, bike is quite popular in the country, especially for the kids, because that's what we, umm, what they write on a daily basis.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in the country, especially for kids, because that's what they ride on a daily basis.

Multiple issues: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' to match general statement (singular/plural issue). Use 'kids' without 'the' for general reference. 'Write' is incorrect verb; correct verb is 'ride' (verb choice error but fits listed types as verb form). Also remove redundant 'we, umm, what' and change 'what they ride' for clarity. Use present simple for general truths ('are', 'ride').

× Not for transportation, but more to like, uh, playing with friends around the neighborhood.

✓ Not for transportation, but more for playing with friends around the neighborhood.

The phrase 'to like ... playing' is awkward and uses the wrong preposition. Use 'for' to indicate purpose: 'for playing.' Remove filler 'like, uh' in spoken answers for clarity. Maintain parallel structure: 'Not for transportation, but more for playing.'

× For adults, maybe some of them use just for exercising.

✓ For adults, maybe some of them use bikes just for exercising.

The original omits the object 'bikes' after 'use.' Also 'use just for exercising' is acceptable but better as 'use bikes just for exercising.' The gerund 'exercising' is correct for purpose, but ensure the sentence has a clear object. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.