Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 문장은 간결하게 주제 문장으로 시작하고, 그 다음에 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이세요. 시제와 동사 형태를 정확히 사용하고, 불필요한 단어는 제거하세요. 예를 들어 'I had a bicycle' 대신 'I had a bicycle when I was a child'로 시작하고, 이어서 'but I couldn't ride it well because I mostly rode a tricycle'처럼 이유를 명확히 연결사(but, because)를 사용해 설명하세요. 또한 발음이 불분명한 부분(예: 'RA Rd.')을 명확히 하고, 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지해 주세요.

例: I had a bicycle when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it very well because I mostly used a tricycle. As a result, I never learned to balance properly until I was older.

提案: 중복 표현과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 주제 문장으로 직접 답한 뒤 구체적 근거를 하나 또는 두 개만 제시하세요. 동사 형태를 정확히(are popular, support, ride) 사용하고, 'especially in Salt City' 같은 지명 뒤에는 이유를 덧붙여 구체화하세요. 예: 'Bikes are popular in my country, especially in Salt City, because the city provides shared bicycles and safe bike lanes.'처럼 연결사로 이유를 명확히 설명하세요.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in Salt City, because the local government provides shared bicycles and good bike lanes. This makes cycling a convenient option for short trips to work or the market.

× I had a bicycle when I was child

✓ I had a bicycle when I was a child

The noun phrase 'a child' requires the indefinite article 'a' before the singular noun 'child'. Without the article it is ungrammatical. Suggestion: Use 'a child' for singular, or 'children' if plural context is intended.

× I cannot riding the bicycle very well

✓ I could not ride the bicycle very well

After modal-like negation 'cannot' you must use the base verb ('ride'), not the -ing form. Also the sentence refers to past ability, so use past modal 'could not' and base verb 'ride'. Suggestion: Use 'could not ride' to indicate past inability.

× because I usually RA Rd. the tricycle in my childhood

✓ because I usually rode a tricycle in my childhood

The original contains garbled text 'RA Rd.' and wrong verb form. For past habitual action use past simple 'rode'. Also include the article 'a' with 'tricycle'. Suggestion: Use 'usually rode a tricycle' to express habitual past action.

× in our our country the bikes are popular

✓ in our country bikes are popular

Duplicate word 'our' is an error; also article 'the' before 'bikes' is optional. Native phrasing is 'in our country bikes are popular' or 'bikes are popular in our country'. Suggestion: Remove duplicate and adjust word order for natural phrasing.

× They supporting the bicycle for everyone

✓ They support bicycles for everyone

Present simple 'support' is needed for habitual fact; 'supporting' (present participle) is incorrect here without auxiliary. Also use plural 'bicycles' or 'the bicycle' depending on meaning. Suggestion: Use 'They support bicycles for everyone' to state a general policy.

× so everyone can share the bicycle and riding about it the way they go to the way

✓ so everyone can share bicycles and ride them on the way to where they are going

Several problems: after 'can' use base verb 'ride' not '-ing'; pronoun reference should be plural 'them' to refer to 'bicycles'; 'riding about it the way they go to the way' is ungrammatical and unclear—rewritten as 'ride them on the way to where they are going' to express purpose/destination. Suggestion: Use 'can share bicycles and ride them to where they are going' for clarity.