Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details (where/when you rode, who taught you, or a short memory). Avoid repetition and use correct tense and word choice.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about seven, and my father taught me to ride it in the park near our house. I used to ride it almost every evening with my friends, which helped me become more confident and active.

提案: Provide a concise, well-structured response: a clear opinion sentence followed by two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce hesitations and repetitions, use correct grammar (plural/singular), and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'mode of transport', 'convenient', 'environmentally friendly').

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country and worldwide. Firstly, they are a convenient and affordable mode of transport for short trips, especially in crowded cities. Secondly, many people cycle for fitness and environmental reasons, because riding a bike is healthy and produces no pollution.

× Yes I did. I had a bike when I I was trying.

✓ Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was young.

Grammar problem type ID:26. The sentence contains a repeated word 'I' and an awkward phrase 'was trying' that does not make sense in context. The intended meaning is likely 'when I was young' (a time reference). Remove the duplicate 'I' and replace 'was trying' with the correct time expression. Suggestion: use clear time expressions such as 'when I was young' or 'when I was a child.'

× Yes, I do think that is that's a bike is popular not in my country only, but I think almost of the country over the world.

✓ Yes, I do think that bicycles are popular not only in my country, but in most countries around the world.

Grammar problem type IDs:1 and 22 and 26. Errors include singular/plural ('a bike' vs 'bicycles'), incorrect word order ('not in my country only' should be 'not only in my country'), and redundant/incorrect phrasing ('almost of the country over the world'). Correct plural noun 'bicycles' to match general statement, use 'not only... but' structure properly, and replace 'almost of the country over the world' with 'in most countries around the world' or 'around the world.' Use consistent subject-verb agreement with plural noun: 'bicycles are.'

× It is easy, uh, it is easy transportation and fast and in same time it's a kind of of sport.

✓ They are easy and fast forms of transportation, and at the same time they are a kind of sport.

Grammar problem type IDs:13 and 22 and 26. Problems include incorrect article and noun forms ('it is easy transportation' should be 'they are easy forms of transportation'), incorrect singular pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'bicycles', repetition 'of of', and awkward phrase 'in same time' which should be 'at the same time.' Also use plural agreement: 'they are.' Suggest using smoother phrasing: 'Bicycles are an easy and fast form of transportation, and at the same time they can be a sport.'