Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문장 구성과 시제, 문법을 바로잡고 이유를 더 명확히 표현하세요. 예를 들어 과거 경험을 말할 때는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 두 문장으로 간단히 나누어 주제문과 이유를 분명히 하세요. 또한 'lean back' 같은 표현은 자전거 타기와 관련해 자연스럽지 않으므로 'ride a bike' 또는 'fall off' 같은 표현을 사용하세요.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I was afraid of getting injured. I avoided riding bikes since I worried I might fall off and hurt myself.

提案: 문법(주어-동사 일치)과 어순을 고치고 연결어를 자연스럽게 사용해 답을 더 간결하고 명확하게 하세요. 또한 구체적인 이유(예: 통근 시간 단축, 비용 절감, 환경 이점)를 하나나 두 가지 덧붙이면 더 설득력 있습니다.

例: Definitely. Bikes are very popular in my country because there are severe traffic jams, so cycling is often faster for short trips. Many people also choose bikes because they are cheaper and more environmentally friendly.

× No, when I was young I am afraid about injuries so I can't try lean back.

✓ No, when I was young I was afraid of injuries so I couldn't try leaning back.

The sentence has multiple issues: 1) Tense consistency: the question asks about the past, so use past tense 'was' instead of 'am' and 'couldn't' instead of 'can't'. 2) Incorrect preposition: use 'afraid of' rather than 'afraid about'. 3) Verb form: after 'try' with the meaning 'attempt' we use the gerund 'leaning back' or 'to lean back'; here gerund fits the structure 'couldn't try leaning back'. Suggested improvement: keep all verbs in past tense for past situations, use 'afraid of', and use the gerund after 'try' when describing attempting an action.

× Definitely yes, because our country have many traffic jams so cannot go to the destination fast.

✓ Definitely yes, because our country has many traffic jams so people cannot get to their destinations quickly.

Errors and fixes: 1) Subject-verb agreement: 'our country' is singular and requires 'has' not 'have'. 2) Missing subject: 'cannot go to the destination fast' lacks a clear subject; add 'people' to indicate who cannot go. 3) Article and noun plurality: 'the destination' is vague; 'their destinations' is more natural. 4) Adverb placement: use 'quickly' rather than 'fast' for this grammatical context. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with its subject, include an explicit subject when needed, and choose appropriate adverb and pluralization for general statements.

× So many people choose by bikes to go to the destination.

✓ So many people choose bikes to go to their destinations.

Problems and corrections: 1) Incorrect preposition: 'choose by bikes' is wrong; the verb 'choose' does not use 'by' to indicate means. Use 'choose bikes' or 'travel by bike'. 2) Article/pronoun and plurality: 'the destination' should be 'their destinations' for a general statement about many people. Suggested improvements: use 'choose bikes' or rephrase as 'travel by bike' and ensure plurality and possessive pronouns match the general subject.