Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Исправьте лексические и грамматические ошибки, используйте связные предложения и избегайте повторов. Начинайте с прямого ответа, затем дайте короткое объяснение с подробностями. Например, замените «write a bike» на «ride a bike», используйте прошедшее время последовательно и свяжите идеи словами типа «however», «but» или «then». Постарайтесь уложиться в 3–4 предложения.

例: Yes, I did. My father tried to teach me to ride, but I found it difficult at first. However, a friend of mine showed me some simple tricks, and I was riding confidently within a couple of minutes.

提案: Улучшите точность грамматики и плавность речи, используйте связки и конкретные примеры. Начните с прямого утверждения, затем добавьте причины и пример. Исправьте ошибки согласования (например, "everyone go" → "everyone goes") и избегайте разговорных восклицаний вроде «yeah, it's cool» в формальной экзаменационной речи.

例: Yes, definitely. In Germany cycling is very common because it is inexpensive and often faster than driving. For example, many people cycle to work or school, and cities have extensive bike lanes that make cycling convenient.

× My father tried to teach me how to write a bike, but it wasn't successful because I thought it was too difficult.

✓ My father tried to teach me how to ride a bike, but he wasn't successful because I thought it was too difficult.

The verb 'write' is incorrect in this context; the correct verb is 'ride' when referring to using a bicycle. Also the impersonal 'it wasn't successful' is unnatural; using 'he wasn't successful' or 'he didn't succeed' is clearer. Suggestion: use verbs appropriate to the activity (ride a bike) and match subjects for clarity. ID:5

× But one friend of mine taught me how to ride a bike just in 2 minutes.

✓ But one friend of mine taught me how to ride a bike in just two minutes.

The original sentence is mostly correct but word order and numeral format can be improved. Place 'just' before the time expression for natural emphasis and write small numbers in words in formal speech: 'in just two minutes.' Keep past tense 'taught.' ID:5

× I'm living in Germany and you can see every day everyone on the street right riding a bike.

✓ I live in Germany, and you can see people riding bikes in the street every day.

Present continuous 'I'm living' is acceptable for temporary situations, but 'I live in Germany' is more natural for a general fact. The original sentence has awkward word order ('every day everyone on the street right riding a bike') — rearrange to 'people riding bikes in the street every day.' Remove the word 'right' which is unnecessary. Use plural 'bikes' with 'people.' ID:6

× It's really popular here because it's cheap and fast, so everyone go to job, to school with a bike and yeah, it's cool.

✓ It's really popular here because it's cheap and fast, so everyone goes to work or to school by bike.

The verb 'go' must agree with the singular indefinite subject 'everyone' — use 'goes' (subject-verb agreement). Use 'go to work' rather than 'go to job.' Use the preposition 'by' with 'bike' (go by bike). Use 'or' instead of comma list for clarity. Remove filler 'and yeah, it's cool' for concise formal correction; if kept, use a separate sentence. ID:2

× so everyone go to job, to school with a bike

✓ so everyone goes to work or to school by bike

Prepositions were incorrect: English uses 'go to work' not 'go to job,' and the usual phrase is 'by bike' to indicate transport. Also use 'or' to connect alternatives. Correct preposition choice improves naturalness. ID:11