Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and correct word order. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (e.g., adjective order, possessives) and avoid filler words like “uh.”

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. It was a big red Yamaha, and many of my friends often asked to borrow it because it was in good condition.

提案: Answer directly then support with specific reasons using linking words. Fix grammar (plural/singular, articles) and avoid fillers. Keep it to one topic sentence plus one supporting sentence with a clear reason or example.

例: I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country. This is because most people prefer cars for comfort and convenience, especially for longer distances or family trips.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was red big, uh, bicycle and the brand name was Yamaha and every my friend, uh, asked me to borrow that's for using.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a big red bicycle; the brand was Yamaha, and all my friends often asked to borrow it.

Original sentence has incorrect order of adjectives ('red big' should be 'big red'), incorrect article placement and extra filler words, incorrect possessive adjective ('every my friend' should be 'all my friends'), and awkward phrasing ('asked me to borrow that's for using'). Suggestion: order adjectives as size then color, split into shorter sentences, use correct possessive/plural forms and replace 'ask me to borrow that's for using' with 'asked to borrow it'.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was red big, uh, bicycle and the brand name was Yamaha and every my friend, uh, asked me to borrow that's for using.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a big red bicycle; the brand was Yamaha, and all my friends often asked to borrow it.

'Every my friend' is incorrect quantifier usage. Use 'every' with a singular noun ('every friend') or use 'all my friends' for plural. Suggestion: choose 'all my friends' to convey that multiple friends asked to borrow the bike.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and it was red big, uh, bicycle and the brand name was Yamaha and every my friend, uh, asked me to borrow that's for using.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a big red bicycle; the brand was Yamaha, and all my friends often asked to borrow it.

The phrase 'asked me to borrow that's for using' misuses pronouns and objects. 'Borrow' requires an object (what is borrowed) and 'it' refers to the bike. Correct form: 'asked to borrow it' or 'asked me to lend it to them.' Suggestion: use clear object pronouns and correct verb patterns.

× I think bikes are not popular in my country unfortunately many people prefer to use uh car. So cars are more popular and more common the.

✓ I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country; unfortunately, many people prefer to use cars. So cars are more common.

Tense and noun form issues: 'I think bikes are not popular' is acceptable but more natural is 'I don't think bicycles are very popular.' 'Prefer to use car' needs plural 'cars.' The trailing 'the' is extraneous. Suggestion: use plural nouns with 'prefer to use' and remove unnecessary words for clarity.

× I think bikes are not popular in my country unfortunately many people prefer to use uh car. So cars are more popular and more common the.

✓ I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country; unfortunately, many people prefer to use cars. So cars are more common.

The singular noun 'car' after 'use' should be plural when referring to people generally ('use cars'). Also 'bikes' can be replaced with 'bicycles' for formality but plural is required. Suggestion: ensure noun number matches general statements about many people.