Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, fluency and add a bit more specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct tense and articles, then give one or two supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant phrases like "I like it very well."

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. In fact, I got it as a birthday present when I was eight, and I used to ride it to the park every afternoon. Because it was lightweight and had a comfortable seat, I learned to ride confidently within a week.

提案: Correct subject-verb agreement and reduce hesitations. Give a clear opinion sentence then add specific supporting details using linking words (for example, reasons or comparisons). Mention who uses bikes and in what situations to make the answer more informative.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular in my country. For example, many people in cities use them for commuting because they are cheap and avoid traffic; in addition, students and delivery workers often rely on bikes for short trips.

× Bike are popular in my country, other people use it very naturally and a lot of people, uh, go to work using it.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country; other people use them very naturally and a lot of people, uh, go to work by bike.

The nouns and pronouns must agree in number. 'Bike' should be plural 'Bikes' to match 'are', and the pronoun 'it' should be plural 'them' to refer to 'bikes'. Also, use 'by bike' as the common prepositional phrase for the mode of transport. Use a semicolon or period to separate independent clauses rather than a comma splice.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The noun phrase needs the article 'a' before 'child' because singular countable nouns require an article or determiner. 'A child' correctly completes the sentence.

× I like it very well.

✓ I liked it very much.

The context is past ('I had a bike when I was a child'), so the verb should be past tense 'liked' for consistency. Also, 'very well' is awkward for expressing strong liking; 'very much' is the common collocation in this context.

× other people use it very naturally and a lot of people, uh, go to work using it.

✓ Other people use them very naturally and a lot of people, uh, go to work by bike.

Referring back to 'bikes' requires the plural pronoun 'them' rather than 'it'. Replacing 'using it' with 'by bike' is more natural English for describing transportation. Capitalize the start of the sentence and avoid repeating 'a lot of people' awkwardly; consider rephrasing for clarity.