Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct tense, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add a brief detail about memories or how you learned. Use linking words like "and" or "so" to connect ideas and correct grammar (e.g., "was" not "do").

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My mother gave me my first bicycle when I was five, and I remember learning to ride it in our backyard; after a few falls I quickly became confident and rode to school with my friends.

提案: Answer directly, clarify what you mean, and use accurate vocabulary. Begin with a clear opinion, then explain with specific examples and linking words like "however" or "for example." Avoid unclear terms (e.g., "UMM" and "share back")—use "rural/urban areas" and "bike-sharing services" instead. Keep sentences concise and grammatical.

例: Bikes are fairly popular in my country, but it depends on the area. In big cities many people use bike-sharing services for short trips, while in rural areas cars and motorcycles are more common because distances are longer.

× Yes I do and yes I do.

✓ Yes, I did.

The examiner asked about past possession 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?', so the student should use past tense. 'Do' is present; use 'did' to match the question and past time frame. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× My mom gave me my first bike when I was five years old and it's very fun for me to learn how to ride a bike.

✓ My mom gave me my first bike when I was five years old, and it was very fun for me to learn how to ride it.

The sentence mixes past tense ('gave') with present tense ('it's', 'to learn'). Because the action of learning happened in the past, verbs should be in past tense. Change 'it's very fun' to 'it was very fun' and 'ride a bike' to 'ride it' to avoid repetition. Use a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× It depends on which area you are.

✓ It depends on which area you are in.

The preposition 'in' is required after 'are' to indicate location: 'are in' not 'are'. Without the preposition the sentence is ungrammatical. Alternatively, one could say 'It depends on the area.'

× UMM is very popular in the big city.

✓ Bikes are very popular in big cities.

'UMM' appears to be incorrect or unclear; likely the student meant 'bikes'. Also 'the big city' is too specific; general statement should use plural 'big cities'. Adjust subject to 'Bikes' to match the question and maintain plural agreement.

× When we need to have a short transportation, we have a share back in our city.

✓ For short trips, we use bike-sharing in our city.

Phrase 'have a short transportation' is unnatural; use 'short trips'. 'We have a share back' is incorrect word choice and structure; likely intended 'we have a shared bike service' or 'we use bike-sharing'. Revise to a concise, idiomatic expression 'For short trips, we use bike-sharing in our city.'