Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: give a clear topic sentence, correct tense consistency, avoid unclear details (e.g. "purple 1"), and limit to up to 5 sentences. Add a linking word to connect ideas and a specific detail about memories or feelings. Also correct grammar (past tense) and small factual clarity.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small purple tricycle with four wheels, and I rode it every afternoon with my brother. Because our street was quiet, we felt safe practicing turns and races, which made those rides a lot of fun.

提案: Make the response more structured and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then use linking words (for example, "for instance" or "also") and give specific examples or reasons. Use varied vocabulary (commuters, recreational cyclists) and avoid repetition ("I see").

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For instance, many people use bicycles as a cheap and efficient way to commute to work, while others ride them for exercise and leisure. In my neighborhood, I often see commuters during rush hour and friends cycling at weekends.

× It was a purple 1 and it has four wheels and I used to ride it every afternoon with my brother.

✓ It was purple and it had four wheels, and I used to ride it every afternoon with my brother.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'It was' is past, but 'it has' is present. Use past tense 'had' to match 'was' and 'used to'. Also 'a purple 1' appears to be a typo or extraneous; 'purple' alone correctly describes the bike. Suggestion: maintain consistent past tense when describing past possessions and habitual past actions. Grammar Problem Type ID: 10

× I see some people use it as their mode of transportation going to their work, and I know some of my friends riding a bike as a hobby.

✓ I see some people using bikes as their mode of transportation to work, and I know some of my friends who ride bikes as a hobby.

There are several issues: 'use it' is unclear—'bikes' is more precise; 'use' should be in -ing form after 'see' (seeing in progress) or rephrased; 'going to their work' is awkward—'to work' is idiomatic. The second clause needs a relative clause or correct verb form: 'I know some of my friends who ride bikes' or 'I know some of my friends ride bikes.' Also ensure plural agreement between 'friends' and 'ride bikes.' Grammar Problem Type ID: 12