Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời nên rõ ràng, ngắn gọn và mạch lạc hơn. Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: “as I have to”, “every to went to to go to school”). Nên mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (màu sắc, lý do, hành trình) với liên từ phù hợp (e.g., "because", "so", "then"). Luyện phát âm và loại bớt tiếng lấp (umm).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was in grade 9. My dad bought me an orange bicycle because he wanted me to ride to school. I used it every day to travel the three kilometers between my home and the high school, so it was very convenient.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý nhưng cần chính xác về ngữ pháp, số ít/những (singular/plural) và mạch lạc hơn. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, rồi giải thích nguyên nhân và đưa ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ như "however", "nowadays" để chuyển ý. Tránh tiếng lấp và sửa cấu trúc như "bike was bike were".

例: In the past, bicycles were a primary means of transport in Vietnam. However, nowadays most people prefer motorbikes because they are faster and more convenient for longer distances and busy streets.

× Yes actually I had a bike when I was in grade 9.

✓ Yes, actually I had a bike when I was in grade 9.

The sentence is correct in tense but needs a comma after 'Yes' for punctuation. No major grammar change; the past tense 'had' matches the time reference.

× My dad bought me an orange one as I have to.

✓ My dad bought me an orange one because I had to.

The original uses 'as I have to' which mixes present tense and incorrect conjunction. Use 'because' to show reason and 'had to' to match the past time frame.

× I had to use my bike to go to school every to went to to go to school every day and umm when I went to high school.

✓ I had to use my bike to go to school every day when I was in high school.

The original has repetition and mixed phrases ('every to went to to go to school every day') causing sentence fragmentation. Simplify and keep past tense consistent: 'had to use' and 'was in high school'. Remove redundant words and filler 'umm'.

× Well, in the past, uh bike was bike were the main transport that Vietnamese people used uh to go far or even near places.

✓ Well, in the past, bikes were the main form of transport that Vietnamese people used to go to both far and nearby places.

Original has number disagreement and word order problems ('bike was bike were'). Use plural 'bikes' with 'were' for past plural subject. 'Main form of transport' is a clearer collocation. Use 'used to go to both far and nearby places' to express range and maintain past tense.

× But now Vietnamese people prefer using motorbike.

✓ But now Vietnamese people prefer using motorbikes.

'Motorbike' should be plural 'motorbikes' when speaking generally about what people prefer. Use plural noun to indicate general preference across many people.