Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep your answer concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., "Yes, I had a bike when I was a child."), then add one or two supporting details using linking words (e.g., "but", "so", "however"). Correct tenses and pronouns: use past tense for childhood (had) and avoid redundant words. Aim for 2–3 sentences, be specific about when you stopped using it or why you no longer have one.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. However, I don’t have one now because I usually travel by bus or other public transport, which is more convenient for my daily commute.

提案: Answer directly and organize details with linking words. Start with a clear opinion (e.g., "Yes, bikes are popular"). Then give specific supporting details: name the bike-sharing system, explain how it works, mention cost and benefits, and conclude with the result. Use correct sentence structure and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, we have a bike-sharing system called Ubike, which is inexpensive and even offers the first 30 minutes for free, so many people use it for short trips and commuting.

× Yes I have but did it's only on my childhood time but I very nowadays I don't have like bike because I still I usually travel by bus or like public transport so I don't have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child, but I don't have a bike now because I usually travel by bus or use public transport.

Problems: incorrect tense and auxiliary use ('have' vs 'had'), erroneous insertion of 'did' and contraction 'it's', awkward time phrase 'on my childhood time', redundancy and incorrect word order ('I very nowadays', 'I still I usually'), and repeated 'like'. Suggestion: use past tense 'had' for possession in childhood, use 'when I was a child' for time reference, and use simple present 'I don't have' for current state. Remove redundant words and choose 'use public transport' or 'travel by bus'.

× Definitely. We have a bike named Ubike is like a public public facility and people can use low price to use this and even when you use 30 minutes it's free.

✓ Definitely. We have a bike-sharing system called Ubike; it is a public service and people can use it at a low price, and the first 30 minutes are free.

Problems: awkward noun phrase 'a bike named Ubike' (Ubike is a system, not a single bike), repeated word 'public public', incorrect phrase 'use low price to use this', and wrong subject-verb agreement for '30 minutes it's free'. Suggestion: call it 'a bike-sharing system called Ubike' or 'a public service', use 'at a low price', and make 'the first 30 minutes are free' for correct agreement and clarity.