Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), use clearer sequencing words, and avoid fillers. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "first", "then"). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had several bikes as a child. First, my very first bike was a tricycle which I used when I was about three. Then I moved on to two different two-wheeled bikes as I grew older, each one slightly larger than the last.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and one brief example. Improve sentence structure and linking phrases (e.g., "because", "for example", "as a result"). Avoid awkward phrasing and expand slightly with concrete details (road conditions, traffic, bike lanes).

例: Not really — bikes are not very popular in my country because most roads lack bike lanes and drivers prioritize cars. For example, the streets are often crowded and narrow, so it feels unsafe to cycle; as a result, most people prefer driving or taking public transport.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?' is in the past tense. The student used the present tense 'have' which is inconsistent. Use the past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time reference in the question; here, use past simple (had).

× Uh, I change bike like twice or three times.

✓ Uh, I changed bikes like two or three times.

The student used present tense 'change' while referring to past events. Also 'bike' should be plural ('bikes') after a verb indicating repeated actions. 'Twice or three times' is better stated as 'two or three times'. Suggestion: Use past simple 'changed' and plural 'bikes'; write numbers in words for speech-like text: 'two or three times'.

× The first one has three wheels and the last two were two wheels.

✓ The first one had three wheels, and the last two had two wheels.

Mixed tenses and awkward phrasing: 'has' (present) should be past 'had' to match 'were'. Also 'were two wheels' is unnatural; use 'had two wheels'. Ensure parallel structure for clarity. Suggestion: Keep past tense for all descriptions ('had') and use parallel phrasing: 'the first one had..., and the last two had...'.

× No, not really.

✓ No, not really.

This short reply is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. It correctly answers the question in conversational style. Suggestion: None.

× Bikes are not popular in my country because the streets are not bike friendly.

✓ Bicycles are not popular in my country because the streets are not bike-friendly.

'Bike friendly' should be hyphenated when used as a compound adjective before a noun: 'bike-friendly'. Also 'bikes' can be replaced with 'bicycles' for formality but 'bikes' is acceptable. Hyphenation clarifies the adjective use. Suggestion: Use 'bike-friendly' with a hyphen when used attributively; consider 'bicycles' for more formal speech.

× They are more car friendly that well we when we are having bikes we are not able to ride it at the streets.

✓ They are more car-friendly, so when we have bikes we are not able to ride them on the streets.

Multiple issues: 'car friendly' needs a hyphen ('car-friendly'); 'that well' is incorrect and likely intended to be 'so' or 'and'; 'when we are having bikes' is unnatural—use simple present/past depending on context ('when we have bikes' or 'when I had a bike'); 'ride it' is wrong pronoun for plural 'bikes'—use 'ride them'; 'at the streets' should be 'on the streets'. Suggestion: Use 'so' to show consequence, hyphenate compound adjectives, use 'have' or 'had' to match tense, use 'them' for plural, and 'on the streets' for correct preposition.