Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific supporting details in coherent order. Correct basic grammar (past tense, articles, word order) and avoid filler words. Use linking words (for example, and, because) to connect ideas and keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small white bike when I was a child, and my grandpa bought it for me. He also taught me how to ride it, which left me with very fond memories of spending time with him.

提案: Provide a complete, coherent answer: state your opinion clearly, then support it with two specific reasons or an example. Avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words (for example, although, however, because) and precise vocabulary (e.g., 'popular', 'commuting', 'bike-sharing', 'exercise').

例: Yes, I think bikes have been popular in my country. In past decades many people used bicycles for exercise and short commutes; however, recently bike-sharing services and electric scooters have changed how people travel in cities.

× I have a little bag which is a white and my grandpa bought for me and I also remembered, oh he taught me to ride the bike.

✓ I had a little bag which was white and my grandpa bought for me, and I also remember he taught me to ride the bike.

Errors: incorrect article and tense consistency. 'a white' is ungrammatical; use 'white' with 'was' as adjective: 'which was white'. The student is speaking about childhood memories, so past tense 'had' and 'remember' should be consistent: 'I had' and 'I also remember' (present memory) or 'I also remembered' (past). Prefer 'I had' and 'I also remember' or keep both past: 'I had... and I also remembered he taught me'. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and use correct article/adjective structure. Note: This correction addresses article/adjective usage and tense consistency which fall under 'Article errors' and 'Present/Past tense' considerations.

× That's beautiful memories between me and my grandpa.

✓ Those are beautiful memories between my grandpa and me.

Errors: incorrect determiner and prepositional object order. 'That's' (singular) mismatches plural 'memories' — use 'Those are' or 'They are'. Also use the possessive phrase order and conventional pronoun order: 'between my grandpa and me' (not 'me and my grandpa'). Suggestion: use plural demonstrative 'those' and place 'my grandpa' before 'me' in the prepositional phrase.

× Especially in the past decades, riding bike umm has been a popular way of, uh, exercising umm.

✓ Especially in past decades, riding bikes has been a popular way of exercising.

Errors: gerund/phrase and plural noun form. Use 'riding bikes' or 'riding a bike' to be grammatical; 'in the past decades' can be simplified to 'in past decades' or 'over the past decades'. Also 'a popular way of exercising' does not need a comma before 'exercising'. Suggestion: use correct noun number and smooth gerund phrase: 'riding bikes has been a popular way of exercising.'

× But I have to say that umm, nowadays in China, most bikes on the street are.

✓ But I have to say that nowadays in China, most bikes on the street are used for short trips or are shared bikes.

Errors: incomplete sentence / sentence without a verb or predicate. The original ends abruptly with 'are' and lacks a complement. Provide a full predicate such as 'are used for short trips' or 'are shared bikes' to complete the sentence. Suggestion: always include the main verb and its complement to complete meaning; avoid trailing 'are' without an object.