Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition (e.g., "used to" repeated), remove filler words ("uh"), and correct tense/word order ("didn't buy" not "didn't bought"). Add one specific supporting detail (a brief reason or memory) using a linking word to make it coherent. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. However, I used to borrow a friend’s bike and ride across my village every weekend, which I enjoyed because it gave me freedom to explore local parks.

提案: Make the answer direct and precise. Start with a clear opinion, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically (use linking words like "because" or "for example"). Avoid vague phrases like "at the time of bus" and remove fillers. Mention a clear comparison or reason to support your view.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular, especially among young people, because they are cheap and convenient for short journeys. For example, many commuters prefer cycling to avoid traffic and save money on bus fares.

× No, but I used to like riding bikes and I used to uh, take my friend's bike for a ride uh, across my village, but unfortunately I didn't, uh, bought a bike for myself.

✓ No, but I used to like riding bikes and I used to, uh, take my friend's bike for a ride across my village, but unfortunately I didn't buy a bike for myself.

The error is using the past tense form 'bought' after the auxiliary 'didn't'. After 'did' or 'didn't' the base form of the verb should be used (didn't buy), not the past form (bought). To improve, remove the past participle and use the base verb 'buy'. Also remove unnecessary filler pauses and commas for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yeah, of course many young people ride bikes, uh, throughout the city and it's one of the main means of transportation here and, uh, at the time of bus specifically.

✓ Yeah, of course many young people ride bikes throughout the city; it's one of the main means of transportation here, especially compared with buses.

The original sentence is awkward and ungrammatical ('at the time of bus specifically' is incorrect). The phrase likely intended a comparison or emphasis that bikes are a main means of transport rather than buses. I corrected the structure to use a semicolon to join related clauses and replaced the incorrect phrase with 'especially compared with buses' for clarity. To improve, plan the comparison clearly and avoid filler words like 'uh' and vague expressions.