Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep the answer within 2–4 sentences. For example, mention who you rode with or a memorable place you cycled.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used it almost every day to visit my friend who lived two streets away, and I especially enjoyed riding in the park on weekends.

提案: Organize the answer with a clear reason and a specific example; remove hesitations and grammatical errors. Use linking words (because, so, for example) and correct phrasing (e.g., 'middle-class people', 'commute to work'). Limit to 2–4 sentences and give one specific supporting detail such as typical uses or statistics if known.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are much cheaper than cars and many middle-class people use them to commute. For example, many office workers cycle to the train station or ride short distances to markets because it saves money and time.

× Yes, I had a bike. It was a bicycle, uh, when I was a child, I used it a lot and I like to ride it.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used it a lot and I liked to ride it.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The context is about childhood (past), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'I like' to 'I liked' to maintain past tense consistency. Also combine 'a bike' and 'a bicycle' into one phrase to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: keep all verbs referring to past events in past tense for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because, uh, it is not too expensive as the cars are, so it is easy to uh buy for a middle class people and they use it to go their jobs umm and it is very easy to ride uh, as well as.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because they are not as expensive as cars, so they are easy for middle-class people to buy and use to go to their jobs, and they are also very easy to ride.

Multiple agreement and article errors: 'bikes' plural should match plural pronoun 'they' (fix by using 'bicycles' and 'they'). 'It is not too expensive as the cars are' is incorrect: use comparative structure 'not as expensive as cars'. 'a middle class people' is incorrect: 'middle-class people' (no article, hyphen). 'go their jobs' needs 'go to their jobs'. Maintain plural agreement throughout. Also clarify repetition and awkward phrasing. Grammar problem type ID: 27