Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha doğal ve akıcı hale getirilmeli. Gereksiz tekrarlar ve dolgu sözcükleri (uh, umm) azaltılmalı. İlk cümlede doğrudan soruya cevap verip ardından kısa bir sebep belirtilmeli. Cümle yapıları basitleştirilmeli ve zaman uyumuna dikkat edilmeli (ör. "when I grew up" değil "when I grew up"). Ayrıca maksimum 5 cümle kuralına uyun ve destekleyici detaylar daha spesifik olmalı (ör. kaç yaşında, bisiklet sahibi olmamanın etkisi).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike as a child. I grew up in a large family with three sisters, so my parents couldn’t afford one for each of us. By the time I was older, I didn’t feel the need for a bike because I preferred walking or using public transport.

提案: Cevap daha düzenli ve net olmalı. Genel bir görüş verildikten sonra spesifik örnek veya sebep eklenmeli. Dolgu kelimeleri çıkarılmalı ve dil bilgisi hataları düzeltilmeli (ör. "trucks" yerine "trucks", "roads are not safe"). Kent adını cümlenin sonuna düzensiz koymaktan kaçının; bağlaçlarla daha akıcı bağlayın. Mümkünse bir çözüm veya alternatif de belirtin.

例: Not really; bikes aren’t very popular in my city. After the recent earthquake, many roads are damaged and busy with trucks, so cycling is unsafe. I live in Hatay, and most people prefer cars or minibuses for safety and convenience.

× Actually, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike because, uh, I have three sisters and uh, we are crowded, uh, we family.

✓ Actually, when I was a child, I didn't have a bike because I had three sisters and we were a crowded family.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. Use past tense 'had' and 'were' to match 'when I was a child.' Subject-verb agreement: 'we were a crowded family' is correct. Suggestion: keep all time references consistent by using past tense verbs for situations in the past.

× So because of it, my father didn't uh, buy for us a bike.

✓ So because of that, my father didn't buy us a bike.

English does not use 'buy for us' in this context; the correct verb pattern is 'buy someone something' (buy us a bike). Also replace vague 'because of it' with 'because of that' for naturalness. Suggestion: use direct object order 'buy us a bike' and clean up filler words.

× And actually when I grow up, I don't need it, I think.

✓ And actually, when I grew up, I didn't need it, I think.

The clause 'when I grew up' refers to the past, so following verbs must be past tense: 'didn't need.' Using present 'grow' and 'don't' is inconsistent. Suggestion: match tense to the time reference; use past tense for past events.

× Actually no umm, for my city, uh, especially for my city after earthquake, uh, the roads not uh, safe and trunks always on the roads and uh, not safe using uh, riding bike uh, in my city.

✓ Actually no. In my city, especially after the earthquake, the roads are not safe: trucks are often on the roads, and it is not safe to ride a bike in my city.

Multiple issues: missing articles ('the earthquake'), missing auxiliary verb 'are' for 'the roads are not safe' (subject-verb agreement), 'trunks' should be 'trucks', and incorrect gerund/infinitive: use 'to ride a bike' or 'riding a bike' with correct structure. Suggestion: add necessary articles, correct noun spelling, include the correct verb 'are', and use 'to ride' for purpose/infinitive clarity.

× I live in Hatai and.

✓ I live in Hatay.

The fragment 'and' at the end creates an incomplete sentence. Also the place name appears to be 'Hatay.' Suggestion: remove the trailing 'and' and provide a complete sentence; check proper noun spelling.