Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp, ngắt câu và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn. Hãy: 1) Sửa thì và cấu trúc (ví dụ: 'I often rode' thay vì 'I often ride') 2) Tách thành 2–3 câu ngắn để tự nhiên hơn; 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (nơi bạn đạp, cảm giác khi đạp) và dùng liên từ phù hợp để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I did. I often rode my bike with my brother after school to unwind, and we usually cycled around the park near our house. Riding helped me relax and stay fit, because the fresh air and gentle exercise boosted my mood and energy.

提案: Câu trả lời không rõ ràng, có lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc lặp. Hãy: 1) Trình bày quan điểm trực tiếp ở câu đầu; 2) Giải thích lý do bằng câu rõ ràng và có liên từ (because, so); 3) Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về khoảng cách hoặc phương tiện phổ biến để làm câu trả lời thuyết phục hơn.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my city. Because distances between home and school are often long and the infrastructure isn't convenient for cycling, most people prefer motorbikes or cars. For instance, I have to travel about 20 kilometres to school, so a motorbike is much more practical.

× Yes I did and I often ride the bike with my brother after school to reduce stress and breath it keep me healthy.

✓ Yes, I did, and I often rode the bike with my brother after school to reduce stress and breathe; it kept me healthy.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses. The question asks about childhood, so actions should be in the past tense. 'ride' should be changed to past 'rode' and 'keep' to past 'kept'. Also 'breath' is a noun but the verb 'breathe' is required here. Add commas and a semicolon to clarify clauses. Suggestion: use consistent past tense verbs for activities in the past and use the verb form 'breathe' for the action of inhaling/exhaling.

× I don't think so because there are many more to buy and cars in my city because it's very far from my home to school so I need to go by motorbike.

✓ I don't think so, because there are many more motorbikes and cars to buy in my city, and my school is very far from my home, so I need to go by motorbike.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrase 'many more to buy and cars'. Reorder to 'many more motorbikes and cars to buy' and separate clauses with commas. Also use 'my school is very far from my home' instead of 'it's very far from my home to school' to correct pronoun and preposition use. Suggestion: make the noun list clear, place modifiers near the nouns they describe, and use 'my school is' for clarity.