Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly answers the question, but it is informal and slightly unstructured. Avoid contractions like "'cause" in formal tests and provide one brief supporting detail to make the response more natural and complete. Keep it to 2–3 sentences, use a linking word, and correct phrasing (e.g., "because my family couldn't afford one").

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family couldn't afford one. However, I often walked to school and sometimes borrowed a neighbor's bike to play with.

提案: Your answer is relevant and provides reasons, but it contains grammar issues (subject-verb agreement and word choice) and some redundancy. Use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repeating similar phrases. Try: "Yes, bikes are popular because they are a convenient form of exercise and transport."

例: Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they offer cheap and convenient transport. In addition, cycling is promoted as a healthy activity, so many people ride to stay fit and save money on transport.

× No, I didn't have one, so 'cause my family couldn't afford to buy me a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have one because my family couldn't afford to buy me a bike.

The phrase "so 'cause" is a redundancy and informal; using both 'so' and 'because' together is incorrect. Choose one conjunction. Use 'because' for a clear reason clause. Also avoid contractions like 'cause in formal speech; replace with because for clarity.

× Yes, bikes are popular in my country because it can help you to boost your energy, to exercise your body, to be strong, to have a strong muscles and strong legs.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in my country because they can help you boost your energy, exercise your body, build strength, and develop strong muscles and legs.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so the verb and pronouns must agree; 'it can' is incorrect. Use 'they can'. Also streamline verb forms: use base verbs after 'help' ('help you boost'), and correct 'a strong muscles' to 'strong muscles' (remove incorrect article and match plural noun). Improve parallelism by using consistent verb forms and concise phrasing.