Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct, concise, and more natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (who gave it, on what occasion, how long you used it). Use linking words for coherence and avoid filler words like “umm”.

例: Yes, I did. My father gave me a bright red bike for my tenth birthday, and I rode it almost every day for several years. Because it was my main way to get around the neighborhood, I quickly became confident riding it and enjoyed exploring nearby parks.

提案: Be more specific and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then add two concrete reasons or examples (convenience, cost, environmental benefits) with linking words (for example, moreover, because). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and choose accurate vocabulary (popular, practical, eco-friendly).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short commutes because they are cheap and convenient, and moreover they help reduce air pollution, which makes cycling an eco-friendly choice.

× Absolutely, I have a bike when I, when I was a child, umm, the bike uh, give uh, by my uh, father to my birthday, uh, and uh, I umm, I use it for year.

✓ Absolutely, I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave me the bike for my birthday, and I used it for years.

Multiple past tense verbs are required because the events happened in the past. 'Have' should be 'had' (past of have). 'Give' should be 'gave' (past of give). 'Use' should be 'used' and 'for year' should be 'for years' to indicate duration. Suggestion: Use past simple for completed actions in the past and plural 'years' for an indefinite multiple-year period.

× To be honest, yes, because uh, bike is umm at the moment is useful and convenient.

✓ To be honest, yes, because bikes are at the moment useful and convenient.

The sentence needs either a plural noun without an article or a singular noun with an article. 'Bike' should be plural 'bikes' to make a general statement. Also use present simple 'are' for general truths. Suggestion: Use 'bikes are' for general statements about a type of object.

× Umm, the bike is not only umm, convenient for them, but also the uh, the bike is environmentally friendly umm, of the world.

✓ Bikes are not only convenient for people, but they are also environmentally friendly for the planet.

Pronoun 'them' is vague; use 'people' to refer to users. Repeating 'the bike' is redundant; use plural 'bikes' and pronoun 'they' to maintain agreement. 'Of the world' is unnatural; use 'for the planet' or 'for the environment.' Suggestion: Use clear nouns (people, planet) and ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns.