Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, grammatical, and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (past tense), correct nouns and verbs, and avoid filler sounds. Use one or two specific supporting details with linking words. For example, correct tense (had), correct word (bike/bicycle), and give a brief reason or time reference. Keep it under 4–5 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I usually shared it with my neighbor because we lived close together, and they were happy to let me borrow it. I didn’t get my own bike until high school, when my parents bought one for me as a birthday present.

提案: Give a clear opinion directly, use correct grammar and comparative phrases, and provide two specific reasons with linking words (e.g., because, however, for example). Avoid vague phrases like 'from a perspective' and correct possessives and word forms. Keep sentences short and coherent.

例: I think motorbikes are more popular than bicycles in my country. This is because motorbikes are faster and more convenient for commuting long distances, and they are affordable for many families. However, bicycles are still common in rural areas for short trips and exercise.

× Absolutely, I do have a buy but unfortunately it's not my own bite because umm, I used to share bicycle with my neighbor as well and they're very nice with sharing the bikes with me.

✓ Absolutely, I did have a bike, but unfortunately it wasn't my own because I used to share a bicycle with my neighbor, who was very kind to share the bikes with me.

Errors: 'buy' and 'bite' are incorrect words (spelling/word choice) causing confusion; tense and agreement issues: question asked about the past ('Did you have'), so use past tense 'did have' and 'wasn't'; missing articles: 'a bicycle'; incorrect pronoun agreement: 'they're' is awkward for a single neighbor—use 'who was' or keep 'they were' if gender-neutral. Suggestion: use correct vocabulary 'bike' or 'bicycle', match past tense throughout, include necessary articles, and use clear relative clause for the neighbor.

× So umm, I just got my own bicycle when I'm in the high school.

✓ So, I got my own bicycle when I was in high school.

Error: tense mismatch—'got' is past but 'I'm in the high school' is present; use past continuous or simple past for time in the past: 'was in high school'. Also omit 'the' before 'high school' unless referring to a specific institution. Suggestion: use past tense consistently when describing past events.

× Actually we do have a bicycle in each house but from a perspective I think motorbike is way more popular in my country due to it's a very easier and convenient vehicle to travelling around and especially by afar as well.

✓ Actually, many households have a bicycle, but in my view motorbikes are much more popular in my country because they are an easier and more convenient way to travel, especially for longer distances.

Errors: 'we do have a bicycle in each house' is too absolute—use quantifier 'many households' or 'most households' if appropriate; 'from a perspective' is awkward—use 'in my view'; subject-verb agreement and plural: 'motorbike is' should be 'motorbikes are'; incorrect contraction 'it's' should be 'they are' referring to motorbikes; comparative form: 'a very easier' is incorrect—use 'easier' or 'much easier'; verb form: 'to travelling around' should be 'to travel'; phrase 'by afar' is incorrect—use 'for longer distances' or 'for travel over longer distances'. Suggestion: fix quantifiers, ensure subject-verb agreement, use correct comparative structure, and choose correct infinitive or noun phrases for travel.