Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần cải thiện phát âm rõ ràng, ngữ pháp (thời quá khứ), và câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, mạch lạc theo cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + chi tiết hỗ trợ. Sử dụng thì quá khứ đúng (had, was), sửa từ vựng sai (bike, child, fell). Thêm liên từ đơn giản (and, so, because) để mạch lạc. Ví dụ cụ thể hơn (tuổi, hoạt động, cảm xúc) sẽ tăng điểm nội dung.

例: Yes. I had a small red bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for my seventh birthday, and I often rode it to the park and to school with my friend. I fell off a few times at first, but I kept practicing until I felt confident.

提案: Cần dùng cấu trúc rõ ràng và từ vựng phù hợp. Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích với lý do cụ thể. Tránh viết tắt khó hiểu; dùng từ như "public transport", "affordable", "environmentally friendly". Dùng liên từ (because, so, therefore) để kết nối lý do. Thêm ví dụ ngắn (thành phố, nông thôn) để cụ thể hóa.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and convenient form of transport. Many people use bicycles in cities to avoid traffic, and farmers also use them in rural areas for short trips. Therefore, bikes are common among people of all ages.

× Yes I have my yes I have a small red bite when I was chill.

✓ Yes, I had a small red bike when I was child.

The student used present tense 'have' but the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so past tense 'had' is required. Also 'bite' and 'chill' are spelling errors: should be 'bike' and 'child'. Use a comma after 'Yes' for clarity.

× My parents bought it for me on my 7th birthday and I used to ride to the park and school with my friend.

✓ My parents bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and I used to ride it to the park and to school with my friend.

The sentence is mostly correct but missing the object 'it' after 'ride' for clarity. Also write 'seventh' in words and add a comma before 'and' for compound sentences. Adding 'to' before 'school' improves parallelism.

× I remember I found a few times but I keep practicing until.

✓ I remember I fell a few times, but I kept practicing until I could ride well.

The student used 'found' instead of the correct past tense verb 'fell' for 'fall'. Also mixed tenses: 'keep' (present) should be past 'kept' to match 'remember' and 'fell'. The clause 'until' is incomplete; add 'I could ride well' to complete the thought.

× Yes, I think BY is popular in my country because why?

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because...

The student wrote 'BY' which seems to be a typo for 'bikes'. The phrase 'because why?' is unnecessary and ungrammatical; instead start the explanation. Maintain present tense 'think' because this is a general opinion.

× It's a trans pub, public transportation and its farmers with everyone.

✓ They are an inexpensive form of transport, easy to use, and affordable for many people.

The original has several incorrect or garbled words: 'trans pub' and 'its farmers with everyone' are incorrect. Rewrite to convey intended meaning: bikes are an inexpensive form of transport, easy to use, and affordable for many. Ensure plural agreement ('They are') and correct adjective placement.