Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct small grammar issues (e.g., "take turns" not "take the turn"). Avoid redundancy and filler words.

例: I didn't have my own bike as a child, but my family shared one. For example, my father usually rode it, and sometimes we took turns so I could practice riding around our neighborhood.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and use specific reasons with linking words. Remove fillers (uh) and correct grammar (e.g., "every third person owns a bike"). Give one or two concrete reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For instance, about one in three people own a bike because they are affordable and ideal for short trips or local work, such as deliveries and commuting to nearby markets.

× I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, but my family had one bike that my father rode and occasionally we would take the turn so I could ride it too.

✓ I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, but my family had a bike that my father rode and occasionally we would take turns so I could ride it too.

Incorrect article 'one bike' is awkward here; use the indefinite article 'a' before singular countable noun. Also 'take the turn' is incorrect collocation for shared use; use the plural noun 'turns' to indicate repeated alternating occasions. Suggestion: use 'a bike' and 'take turns' to sound natural.

× Well, in my country, bikes are popular because, uh, every third person is having a vehicle as a bike because they get so many, uh, because they need to uh, do work with the bikes and uh, for local work, they usually ride on a bike.

✓ Well, in my country, bikes are popular because roughly every third person has a bike as a vehicle; they use them a lot because they need them for work and for local travel.

Multiple tense and usage problems: 'is having' is incorrect here because possession is expressed with simple present 'has' (present tense usage). 'Every third person is having a vehicle as a bike' is awkward; use 'every third person has a bike as a vehicle.' 'They get so many' is vague and ungrammatical; replace with 'they use them a lot.' 'Do work with the bikes' is awkward; use 'need them for work.' Also 'ride on a bike' should be 'ride a bike' or 'use them for local travel.' Suggestions: use simple present for habitual facts, eliminate filler words, and choose natural collocations like 'has a bike,' 'use them,' 'for work,' and 'for local travel.'