Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically correct, fluent and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, avoid hesitations (“umm”), and give one or two brief supporting details (reason or memory). Use linking words if adding details. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. I rode it to visit my friends and to go to the park almost every weekend, which helped me feel independent.

提案: Reduce repetition, use correct tense and more precise vocabulary, and add a specific example or reason to support your view. Use a linking word such as “because” or “for example” to connect your opinion and evidence. Keep answers natural and within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I believe bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips to work or market. For example, I often see commuters riding bikes to the train station during rush hour.

× I don't have any bicycle during, umm, when I was a child.

✓ I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child.

This sentence mixes present and past tenses and misuses the determiner and preposition. The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'didn't have' (Grammar problem type ID 5: Past tense issue). 'Bicycle' is a singular countable noun and requires the article 'a' rather than 'any' (Grammar problem type ID 22: Article errors / ID 1: Singular and plural issue). The word 'during' is unnecessary and incorrect here; use the time clause 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: match the tense to the time frame (past), use correct article with singular countable nouns ('a bicycle'), and remove unnecessary prepositions like 'during' in this context.

× I I believe that bicycles are popular in my country because I saw a lot of people use it for basic transportation.

✓ I believe that bicycles are popular in my country because I saw a lot of people using them for basic transportation.

Several issues: omit the repeated 'I' and use present tense 'believe' to express current opinion (Grammar problem type ID 6: Present tense issue). After 'saw,' the action of people using bikes is best expressed with the -ing form 'using' (Grammar problem type ID 8: Verb + -ing form) or with 'who use.' The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because it should refer to the plural noun 'bicycles,' so use 'them' (Grammar problem type ID 12: Incorrect use of pronouns). Also ensure subject-verb agreement when referring to plural subjects. Suggestion: remove repetition, keep present tense for opinions, use 'using' or a relative clause, and match pronouns in number to their antecedents.