Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Directly answer the examiner's question with a clear topic sentence and avoid repeating the question. Provide 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., "Yes, I did. ") and keep the response concise (no more than 5 sentences). Mention when you had the bike, how often you used it, or a short memory to make the answer specific.

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was seven and rode it almost every day after school to the park. Because my neighborhood was safe and quiet, I often practiced tricks with friends, which helped me become more confident on two wheels.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence (e.g., "Yes, I think bikes are very popular") and then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., "because", "for example"). Avoid tense conflicts and redundancy. Use varied vocabulary (e.g., "popular", "common", "a popular means of transport and leisure") and keep under five sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, families often cycle together on weekends, and many cities have dedicated bike lanes, which makes cycling convenient and safe.

× Yes, bikes are popular in in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular in our country.

There is a duplicated preposition 'in in'. Remove the extra 'in' so the correct prepositional phrase is 'in our country'. Ensure only one preposition is used before the noun phrase.

× To be honest, it is one of the main source of leisure when I was a kid.

✓ To be honest, it was one of the main sources of leisure when I was a kid.

The sentence mixes present 'is' with a past time reference 'when I was a kid'. Use past tense 'was' for consistency. Also 'one of the main source' has a singular/plural mismatch: after 'one of the' the noun should be plural ('sources'). Correct wording: 'it was one of the main sources of leisure when I was a kid.' This keeps tense consistent and fixes number agreement.