Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep the answer within 2–3 sentences. For example, use “I didn’t have a bike when I was a child” and then explain why or what changed.

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. However, now I often use my father’s bike to travel short distances because it is convenient and inexpensive.

提案: Make the answer more natural and logically organized. Start with a clear opinion, then use linking words (for example, because, therefore, so) to give specific reasons and a brief example. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., “common,” “affordable,” “low-income”). Avoid repetition and run-on sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very common in my country because many people cannot afford cars. Therefore, bicycles are an affordable and practical way to get around, especially in crowded cities and rural areas.

× No, I don't have my personal bike when I was child, but nowadays I use my father's bike.

✓ No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child, but nowadays I use my father's bike.

Errors: mixed present tense 'don't have' with past time 'when I was a child' (Present tense issue ID 6 and Past tense issue ID 5), incorrect possessive phrase 'my personal bike' (word choice/article issue ID 22), and missing article 'a' before 'child' (article error ID 22). Correction: change to past tense 'didn't have' to match 'when I was a child', use 'my own bike' which is natural in English, and add the article 'a' before 'child'. Suggestion: Keep time expressions and verb tenses consistent (use past tense for past situations) and prefer natural collocations like 'my own bike' instead of 'my personal bike'.

× Yes, bikes are most important vehicle used in my country because in my country there are various poor people who don't buy cars so that's why they use bike because it is cheapest.

✓ Yes, bikes are the most important vehicles used in my country because there are many poor people who cannot afford cars, so they use bikes because they are the cheapest option.

Errors: missing definite article 'the' before 'most important' and incorrect singular 'vehicle' instead of plural 'vehicles' (Article errors ID 22 and Singular/plural issue ID 1 and Subject-verb agreement ID 27), repetition 'in my country' is redundant (sentence structure ID 26), awkward 'various poor people' and incorrect modal 'don't buy cars' for ability/affordability (word choice and modal verb usage ID 4), singular 'bike' and 'it is cheapest' should be plural and include 'the' or 'an' (Singular/plural ID 1 and Article errors ID 22). Correction: use 'the most important vehicles', replace 'various poor people who don't buy cars' with 'many poor people who cannot afford cars', and make verbs and pronouns plural 'bikes... they are'. Suggestion: Use correct articles with superlative forms ('the most...'), match noun plurality with context, prefer precise vocabulary like 'cannot afford' rather than 'don't buy', and avoid unnecessary repetition.