Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer grammatically correct, concise, and add a brief reason or detail. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then one supporting detail. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or took public transport.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, use linking words for supporting points, be specific about why bikes are popular, and avoid hesitations and repetition. Keep it to 2–3 sentences with relevant vocabulary (affordable, practical, commuting, environment).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Nowadays many people find them affordable and practical for short commutes, and they are also promoted as an environmentally friendly way to travel.

× No, I don't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present simple ('I don't have') with a past time expression ('when I was a child'). Use past simple ('didn't have') to match the past time reference. Suggestion: use past tense consistently for events that occurred in the past.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in our country uh, bikes, uh, now, nowadays everyone can afford a can afford bike and uh, we went to uh, we went a foot, a bike and, and a bike is.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in our country. Nowadays everyone can afford a bike, and people often ride bikes to get around.

The original contains tense and redundancy problems and unclear fragments. 'Now' and 'nowadays' require present simple for general truths ('are popular', 'can afford'). Remove repeated phrases ('can afford a can afford') and unclear fragments ('we went a foot, a bike and, and a bike is'). Provide a clear, complete sentence structure: subject + verb + object. Suggestion: speak in complete sentences, avoid repetition, and use present simple for general facts.