Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and give a clear topic sentence plus a brief reason. Avoid redundancy and verb tense errors. Use linking words for coherence. For example, start with a direct sentence ("No, I didn't") then add one or two supporting details: why not and a short consequence or feeling.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My mother thought it was too dangerous, so she never bought one for me. As a result, I learned to use public transport early, and I only started cycling when I was older.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence answering the question, then support it with specific reasons and an example. Correct grammar (e.g., 'quite popular', 'people are in a rush', 'use public transport'). Use one linking phrase like 'because' or 'for example' and avoid filler sounds like 'mmm'.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in Hong Kong. This is because the city is very crowded and fast-paced, so most people prefer the convenience of the MTR and buses. For example, commuting by public transport is usually quicker and more reliable than cycling in busy areas.

× No, I didn't have it when I was a child because my mother was so afraid that I would hurt myself so she didn't bought me one.

✓ No, I didn't have one when I was a child because my mother was so afraid that I would hurt myself, so she didn't buy me one.

The error involves past tense auxiliary use. After the auxiliary did (didn't) the main verb must be in base form, so 'bought' is incorrect; use 'buy'. Also 'it' is unclear for 'bike'—use 'one'. Add a comma before 'so' connecting two independent clauses. Suggestion: after 'didn't' use base verb forms and use 'one' to refer to a previous noun. Grammar problem type ID:5

× MMM, that is a good question. I don't think quite a popular in my country because I live in Hong Kong and usually I think the people there are not very patient and are very rush. So people there would tend to utilize the public transport rather than.

✓ Hmm, that is a good question. I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because I live in Hong Kong, and usually people there are not very patient and are often in a hurry. So people tend to use public transport instead.

Multiple errors: 'I don't think quite a popular' is ungrammatical—after 'think' we need a clause (subject + verb) or use 'are' with the adjective: 'I don't think bikes are very popular'. 'Very rush' is incorrect adjective use; the correct expression is 'in a hurry' or 'rushed/short-tempered' but here 'in a hurry' fits. 'Would tend to utilize' is awkward; use 'tend to use'. The sentence ended with 'rather than' but lacked the second element; replace with 'instead'. Suggestions: use complete clauses after 'I think', choose correct adjectival phrases ('in a hurry'), prefer 'tend to use' and finish comparative phrases ('instead'). Grammar problem type ID:26