Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và phát âm, trả lời rõ ràng hơn với cấu trúc chủ đề + chi tiết, dùng từ vựng chính xác và câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu). Cụ thể: (1) Dùng thì quá khứ phù hợp: "I had" thay vì "I just have"; (2) Sửa trật tự và từ sai: "when I was about ten years old"; "green bike" thay vì "green bite"; (3) Nêu rõ mục đích sử dụng với một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ, nối các ý bằng liên từ đơn giản như "and" hoặc "so"; (4) Giữ phát âm từ số và từ vựng quan trọng rõ ràng (ten, bike, school).

例: Yes. I had a small green bike when I was about ten years old. My mother bought it for me so I could ride to school and play with my friends. I remember using it almost every day during summer.

提案: Cải thiện độ tự nhiên và tính mạch lạc: bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, dùng linking words hợp lý (e.g., "however", "because", "mainly"), sửa từ và cụm từ không chính xác ("varies from person to person", "motorbikes"), cung cấp một ví dụ hoặc so sánh cụ thể. Giữ tối đa 4–5 câu.

例: It depends on the age group. In my country, most adults use motorbikes or cars to travel to work because they are faster and more convenient. However, cycling is still quite popular among children and teenagers for leisure and short trips. For example, you often see kids riding bikes in parks on weekends.

× Well if I'm not mistaken I just have a personal bike.

✓ Well, if I'm not mistaken, I only had a personal bike.

The speaker is talking about a past situation (when they were a child), so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'had' instead of 'have' and 'only' fits better than 'just' here. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and add commas for clarity.

× When I whistle the 10 years old is is a green bite that my mom purchased for me to go to the school and do some.

✓ When I was about 10 years old, it was a green bike that my mom bought for me to go to school and do some errands.

Multiple errors: 'whistle' is incorrect word choice; should be 'was about' or 'was'. 'is is' is redundant and wrong tense; use past 'was'. 'bite' is a misspelling of 'bike'. 'purchased' is grammatically acceptable but 'bought' is more natural in speech; keep past tense. 'to the school' should be 'to school' (no article). 'do some' is incomplete; specify 'errands' or 'things'. Suggestion: use correct verbs in past tense and common collocations (go to school, buy/bought).

× Well, it varies from our person to person.

✓ Well, it varies from person to person in my country.

The phrase 'our person to person' is incorrect; the standard expression is 'from person to person' or 'from one person to another'. Add 'in my country' to clarify the context. Suggestion: use fixed expressions and place country reference appropriately.

× This is because the orders often go to work or school by motorbike instead of biking.

✓ This is because adults often go to work or school by motorbike instead of cycling.

'orders' is incorrect word choice; likely 'older' or 'adults' intended. 'biking' is acceptable but 'cycling' is more natural here; 'go to work or school by motorbike' is fine. Suggestion: choose correct nouns ('adults') and natural verbs ('cycle').

× Biking is more popular in children and teenagers.

✓ Cycling is more popular among children and teenagers.

Use 'among' to indicate popularity within groups, not 'in'. 'Cycling' is slightly more natural than 'biking' and maintain present simple for general truth. Suggestion: use 'popular among' and correct gerund form if needed.