Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be consistent with past tense and make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., how you used the bike, where you rode it), and use a linking word to connect ideas. Keep to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small blue bike when I was about five or six, and I used it almost every day after school to ride around my neighborhood. Because my school was nearby, I usually met friends at the park and we would race or practice simple tricks, which was my favorite way to relax.

提案: Use correct subject-verb agreement and avoid repetition. Provide a clear opinion, then support it with a specific reason and an example. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas and keep the response to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are fairly popular in my country because many families encourage outdoor play. For example, I often see children riding bikes in the evenings around the neighborhood parks, which they use to unwind after school.

× I do remember that I have a bike when I was a child, when I was 5 or 6 years old, and I use it every day as my recreational activity after school.

✓ I do remember that I had a bike when I was a child, when I was 5 or 6 years old, and I used it every day as my recreational activity after school.

The sentence mixes present tense verbs (have, use) with a past time reference (when I was a child). Use the past tense 'had' and 'used' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: when describing past events, consistently use past-tense verbs (e.g., 'I had', 'I used'). Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Bikes are quite popular in our country because I often see children who plays with their bike after school and I think that it is their way of relaxation after a tiring day on after school.

✓ Bikes are quite popular in our country because I often see children who play with their bikes after school, and I think that it is their way of relaxing after a tiring day at school.

There are multiple errors: 'children' is plural so the verb should be 'play' not 'plays' (subject-verb agreement). 'Their bike' should be pluralized to 'their bikes' to match the plural possessive 'their'. 'Way of relaxation' is unnatural; use the gerund 'relaxing'. 'On after school' is incorrect preposition and extra word; use 'at school'. Suggestions: ensure verbs agree with plural subjects, match possessives to number, use 'way of' + gerund for activities (way of relaxing), and use correct prepositions for locations ('at school'). Grammar problem type ID: 27