Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Give a direct, concise answer (topic sentence) and one or two supporting details. Keep it natural and avoid repetition. For example, start with "Yes, I did" or "No, I didn't," then add where, when, or why briefly using linking words like "because" or "so."

例: Yes, I did. I got a red bicycle when I was seven, and I rode it to school and around the neighborhood almost every day because it was faster than walking.

提案: The answer communicates the main idea but has issues: hesitations, repetition, grammar errors, unclear phrases, and a lack of varied vocabulary. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "more convenient"), and one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words (e.g., "because," "for example"). Reduce hesitations and filler words. Practice short, fluent sentences and use specific examples (traffic, cost, parking).

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because cities are overcrowded and traffic is terrible. For example, many people use bicycles to commute short distances since they are cheaper than cars and easier to park, so they save both time and money.

× I think bikes are P popular in my country because in uh in uh such a overpopulated country, bikes are a much convenient than cars are in such vehicle and it can easily be umm right through the roads.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because, in such an overpopulated country, bikes are much more convenient than cars and they can easily go through the roads.

Errors: 1) 'P popular' is invalid — remove stray letter. 2) 'such a overpopulated country' uses incorrect article + adjective order; correct is 'such an overpopulated country' but better 'in such an overpopulated country'. This is an article/adjective issue (IDs 22 and 18) but mainly affects adjective/article use so treated as adjective/adverb error. 3) 'a much convenient' is ungrammatical: 'convenient' is an adjective that requires 'much more convenient' or 'far more convenient' for comparison; use comparative form 'much more convenient than cars'. 4) 'are in such vehicle' is unclear and incorrect preposition/word choice; remove phrase. 5) 'it can easily be umm right through the roads' has wrong pronoun and verb form and extra filler; use plural 'they' to match 'bikes' and active verb 'go through the roads' or better 'navigate the roads easily'. Suggestions: remove filler 'uh/umm', use correct comparative 'much more convenient', match subject and verb number (they can), and reorder phrase to 'in such an overpopulated country' or 'because the country is overpopulated'.