Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говоря о прошлом, используйте правильные времена (past simple) и сокращайте заполнители («uh», «I, I») — они уменьшают ясность. Начинайте с прямого утверждения (topic sentence), затем добавляйте одно-два конкретных пояснения с логической связкой. Избегайте противоречивых фраз («I like to prefer» неясно) и формулируйте причины кратко и корректно.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents preferred to save money for other things, so they never bought one for me. I wasn’t very interested in cycling anyway, so I didn’t ask them to get one.

提案: Используйте более точную лексику и структуру: начните с чётного мнения, затем приведите конкретные причины и примеры с связующими словами (for example, because, therefore). Избегайте словесных повторов и неуклюжих выражений («when it comes to cycle»).

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many cities have dedicated cycle lanes. For example, in my city there are several long bike paths and traffic rules that protect cyclists, which encourages more people to ride.

× Uh, suddenly I didn't have a bike when I was a kid.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a kid.

The sentence uses 'suddenly' incorrectly and sounds unnatural in this context; the main issue is word choice rather than tense. Replace 'suddenly' with 'No' to clearly answer the examiner's question. Use simple past 'didn't have' which correctly matches 'when I was a kid'.

× Uh, because I, I don't, I didn't really interested in.

✓ Because I wasn't really interested in it.

The original mixes present and past forms and misuses 'interested' without the correct auxiliary. 'Interested' requires a verb like 'was' in past: 'I wasn't really interested in it.' This matches the past timeframe. Also add the object 'it' for completeness.

× So I, uh, I, I wasn't ask, I have not asked my parents about this.

✓ So I didn't ask my parents about it.

The sentence mixes tenses and incorrect verb forms: 'wasn't ask' is ungrammatical and 'I have not asked' conflicts with simple past context. Use simple past 'didn't ask' to match the earlier statements and change 'this' to 'it' for natural phrasing.

× But I like to prefer.

✓ But I preferred not to.

'Like to prefer' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'Prefer' expresses comparison and doesn't combine naturally with 'like to'. In the past context, use 'I preferred not to' or 'I didn't want one' depending on intended meaning.

× Yeah, I think bikes are quite popular in our country because there are a lot of lines for them, like I would say roads for them, especially when it comes to cycle, when it comes to cycle safely.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in our country because there are many lanes and roads for them, especially when it comes to cycling safely.

Several problems: 'lines' is the wrong word; use 'lanes'. 'A lot of' with countable plural is better as 'many'. Repetition 'when it comes to cycle' is incorrect; use the gerund 'cycling'. Also 'especially when it comes to cycling safely' is clearer. Ensure subject-verb agreement by keeping 'bikes are' and plural nouns consistent.