Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 어순, 시제 사용에 오류가 많습니다. 또한 문장이 장황하고 의미가 불분명합니다. 먼저 과거 시제를 정확히 사용하세요(예: 'had'/'used to'). 핵심 문장을 먼저 말한 뒤, 한두 개의 구체적인 세부사항으로 뒷받침하세요. 연결어를 사용해 문장 흐름을 자연스럽게 만드세요. 예: 주어+과거동사로 시작하여 왜 그 경험이 기억에 남는지 또는 얼마나 자주 했는지를 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used to ride it with my friends around the apartment park almost every day, and we often raced each other. Because I wanted to ride well, I practiced every afternoon until I felt confident.

提案: 의견은 명확하지만 표현과 어휘 선택에 오류가 있습니다('thought' 대신 'think', 'bicycle' 복수형 등). 또한 구체적인 예시나 이유를 한두 가지 더 제시하면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 연결어로 이유를 말하고, 연령대나 장소 같은 구체적 정보를 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, I often see people of all ages riding bikes in parks and on city streets, and many cities have bike lanes and rental services which makes cycling convenient.

× Yes, I have a bicycle when I was charged and I used to like eat my with my friends around the apartment park and I want to ride it well so I practice to ride it with my friends a lot.

✓ Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. I used to like riding it with my friends around the apartment park, and I wanted to ride it well so I practised riding it with my friends a lot.

The student mixed present and past tenses and used incorrect verb forms. 'Have' should be past 'had' to match 'when I was a child' (past time). 'Charged' is incorrect and likely a typo for 'child'. 'Used to like eat my' should be 'used to like riding it' — after 'like' the gerund is required when describing an activity in habitual past. 'I want to ride it well' should be past 'I wanted' to keep past narrative. 'I practice to ride it' should be 'I practised riding it' — British/consistent past tense and gerund after 'practise'. Suggestions: keep the same tense for events in the past, use gerunds for activities (like + -ing), and correct typos that change meaning. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. Uh, the reason why I thought that is I can see a lot of bicycle everywhere I go and regardless of age people ride bike money.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country. The reason I think that is I can see a lot of bicycles everywhere I go, and people of all ages ride bikes.

The student mixed past and present: 'the reason why I thought that' conflicts with 'I think' — use present 'I think' and 'the reason I think that'. 'A lot of bicycle' should be plural 'a lot of bicycles' (count noun plural). 'Regardless of age people ride bike money' contains several errors: missing preposition/comma, 'bike money' is incorrect—likely intended 'ride bikes' or 'ride them' and 'regardless of age' is better expressed as 'people of all ages'. Suggestions: maintain consistent tense, use plural for countable nouns when speaking about many items, and choose the correct collocations (people of all ages, ride bikes). (Grammar problem type ID: 6)