Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, clarity and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, avoid hesitations and repetition, and provide concise supporting details (who bought it, what happened, when). Use linking words for sequence (e.g., "but then", "unfortunately"). Keep answer under 5 sentences.

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a teenager. My father bought me a Taiwanese bike, but I forgot to lock it, and unfortunately someone stole it one afternoon. I was very upset because I used it to go to school.

提案: Make the answer more natural and precise. Begin with a direct opinion, then add specific supporting details and a linking word. Correct word choice errors (e.g., "mature" → likely "market" or "school" or "nearby places"). Mention examples or reasons (convenience, bike lanes, affordability). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in cities like Taipei. There are many public bike-sharing schemes and dedicated bike lanes, so people often use bikes to commute to work or run errands. This is convenient and affordable, especially during rush hour.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a teenager uh, my daddy umm buy me a bike is from Taiwanese brand and I forgot to lock my bicycle.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a teenager. My daddy bought me a bike from a Taiwanese brand and I forgot to lock my bicycle.

Multiple errors: 'have' should be past tense 'had' to match 'when I was a teenager' (tense consistency - Present tense issue ID 6 and Past tense issue ID 5). 'buy' should be past simple 'bought' (past participle/past tense). Word order and sentence boundaries needed splitting into two sentences for clarity (sentence structure issue ID 26). Suggestion: use past tense consistently for past events and separate ideas into clear sentences.

× My bike is stolen by others, I would say and also he uh, my steady just stolen my.

✓ My bike was stolen by someone, I would say. Also, my steady... just stole mine. (If 'steady' means 'friend' or 'partner', replace with the correct noun.)

Errors include wrong tense and passive/active mix: 'is stolen' should be past passive 'was stolen' to describe a past event (There be issue ID 3 and Past tense issue ID 5). 'stolen my' is incomplete and incorrect order; use 'stole mine' for active voice or 'my bike was stolen' for passive (verb form issues ID 9 and sentence structure ID 26). 'steady' is unclear; likely wrong word choice (incorrect use of pronouns/adjectives ID 12/13). Suggestion: choose correct noun, keep consistent past tense, and use complete clauses.

× In cities like Taipei there are many many bike sharing in the city and people use bike to commute to their workplace or to mature.

✓ In cities like Taipei there are many bike-sharing services in the city, and people use bikes to commute to their workplace or to school.

Problems: 'bike sharing' needs a noun like 'services' or hyphenated 'bike-sharing' (word formation - adjective/noun issue ID 13). 'use bike' should be plural 'use bikes' (singular/plural issue ID 1). 'to mature' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'to study' or 'to go to school' (wrong word choice - sentence meaning error ID 26). Suggestion: use correct compound nouns, match pluralization, and choose the appropriate destination verb (commute to work or to school).

× So this is very common and convenient to use bike to work.

✓ So it is very common and convenient to use bikes to get to work.

Problems: 'use bike to work' lacks plural 'bikes' (singular/plural issue ID 1) and needs an infinitive/object phrase 'to get to work' for natural English (sentence structure/adverbial phrase ID 26). 'This' is vague; 'it' or 'this practice' is better. Suggestion: use plural when speaking generally and a natural verb phrase 'get to work' or 'commute to work'.