Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сформулируйте ответ более естественно и грамотно: дайте короткое утверждение, затем добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения. Избегайте повторов и ошибок в словах и порядке (например, «you were when I was» — неверно). Используйте связку для плавного перехода (например, “and” или “so”) и конкретизируйте: где или как часто вы катались.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day around my neighborhood, usually after school. I enjoyed cycling with my friends and sometimes we went to a nearby park.

提案: Исправьте лексику и структуру: используйте точные слова (не «heels» — вероятно, вы имели в виду «health» или «exercise»). Дайте прямой ответ, затем объясните причину с конкретным примером и свяжите идеи словами типа «because», «for example», «so». Избегайте лишних пауз и междометий («uh").

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for exercise and short commutes. For example, commuters often cycle to work to save money and stay fit, and cities have more bike lanes now, so cycling is safer.

× Yes, I had a bike when you were when I was a child and and I usually did cycling.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, and I usually cycled.

The sentence contains redundant and incorrect phrasing and wrong verb form. 'when you were when I was a child' is a repetition and wrong subject — it should be 'when I was a child'. 'and and' is duplication. 'I usually did cycling' is unnatural: English uses the verb 'cycle' or the phrase 'went cycling'; the simple past 'cycled' matches the past time reference. Suggestion: remove repeated words, use the correct subject, and use the simple past or 'went cycling' for natural phrasing.

× Yes, I do, uh, I think bikes are popular in my country because uh, more people uh, ride the bike for, uh, for the heels, uh, for improve their heels.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are popular in my country because more people ride bikes for their health and to improve it.

Problems include incorrect article and noun form ('the bike' should be 'bikes' or omitted), wrong preposition and phrase 'for the heels' which is incorrect and likely intended 'for their health', and wrong verb form 'for improve' which needs 'to improve' or 'to improve it'. Also remove filler sounds for clarity. Suggestion: use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, use 'for' + noun ('for their health') or 'to' + verb ('to improve their health'), and match pronouns ('their health').