Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be accurate, grammatical and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question in past tense (e.g. “Yes, I had a bike when I was six.”). Then add one or two brief supporting details (where you rode it, who taught you) using linking words like “and” or “because.” Avoid hesitation words and incorrect nouns (you said “bag” instead of “bike”).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was six. I learned to ride it in the park near my house, and my father taught me by holding the seat until I could balance. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels, and I used it almost every day after school.

提案: Organize your answer and use correct vocabulary and tenses. Begin with a clear statement (e.g. “Yes, bikes are popular in China.”). Then give specific reasons and time references, using linking words like “in the past,” “now,” or “because.” Avoid filler words and repeated phrases. Use correct collocations (e.g. “popular in,” “go to work by bike,” “for health”).

例: Yes, bikes are popular in China. In the past, many people used bicycles as the main means of transport to go to work, but now more people use cars and public transport. However, cycling remains common for exercise and short trips because it is healthy and inexpensive.

× Yes, I have a bag when I'm, uh, six years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was six years old.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so past tense should be used. 'Have' is present tense; 'had' is the correct past-tense verb (Grammar Problem Type 6). Also 'I'm, uh, six years old' mixes present tense with a past time reference; replace with 'I was six years old'. Additionally, the noun 'bag' seems contextually wrong; the question asks about a bike, so use 'bike'. Suggestion: use simple past tense for past events and ensure the noun matches the question.

× Yes, thanks are very popular in China, especially in several years ago, many people just go to work about back and now for nowadays, nowadays, MO, most people still like cycling for healthy.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in China. A few years ago, many people just rode them to go to work, and now, nowadays, most people still like cycling for health.

This sentence contains multiple tense and word-choice errors. 'Thanks' is incorrect; it should be 'bikes'. Use 'are' for a general present statement (present simple) about popularity. 'In several years ago' is incorrect; use 'a few years ago' for past reference and use past tense 'rode' for actions in the past (Grammar Problem Type 6). 'Many people just go to work about back' is ungrammatical; replace with 'they rode them to go to work'. 'Now' and 'nowadays' are redundant—choose one and use present tense for current habits: 'nowadays, most people still like cycling for health' (or 'for their health'). Suggestion: separate ideas into clear sentences, keep consistent tense for each time frame, and choose correct nouns and verbs.