Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 오류를 고치고 문장을 더 자연스럽게 연결하는 연습을 하세요. 구체적으로는 과거 경험을 말할 때 과거 시제를 사용하고, ‘a injury’처럼 관사와 발음 규칙을 바로잡으세요. 또한 이유를 제시할 때 연결어(for that reason, because)나 간단한 추가 세부사항(예:몇 살 때부터, 어떤 활동을 피했는지)을 넣어 답변을 풍부하게 만드세요. 예: 과거 시제로 시작하고 부상에 대한 간단한 설명을 추가하며 문장 수는 2~3문장으로 유지하세요.

例: I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because I thought they were dangerous. I also had a back injury, so my parents discouraged me from riding. For that reason, I usually walked or used public transport instead.

提案: 중복 표현과 불필요한 망설임을 줄이고 문장을 더 정확하게 구성하세요. ‘flat lands’나 ‘flat loads’ 같은 표현을 정확히 사용하고, 한두 개의 구체적 이유(예: 안전, 레저 문화, 자전거 도로의 증가)를 연결사(so, therefore, because)로 자연스럽게 잇는 연습을 하세요. 또한 예시나 비교를 하나 추가하면 답변이 풍부해집니다. 답변은 2~3문장으로 명확히 말하세요.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. There are many flat areas and dedicated cycling paths, so people often cycle for leisure and commuting. For example, families often go cycling on weekends because it is safe and enjoyable.

× I have never had a bike when I was young because it is quite dangerous.

✓ I never had a bike when I was young because it was quite dangerous.

The sentence mixes present perfect ('have never had') with a specific past time reference ('when I was young'), which requires simple past. Also the reason should match past tense: 'it was quite dangerous'. Suggestion: use simple past for actions or states completed in a past period (I never had; it was).

× Also I have a injury on my back so I avoid to have bike.

✓ Also I had an injury on my back so I avoided riding a bike.

Several issues: use of present perfect ('have') with a past context requires simple past ('had'). 'a injury' needs the article 'an' but better is 'an injury'—however the sentence context fits past: 'I had an injury'. 'avoid to have' is incorrect; after 'avoid' use the gerund form: 'avoided riding'. 'bike' as a count noun needs an article: 'a bike'. Suggestion: use simple past for past events, use 'avoid' + verb-ing, and use correct articles before vowel sounds ('an injury').

× Yes, I would like to say yes.

✓ Yes, I would like to say that yes, bikes are popular.

The phrase 'I would like to say yes' is awkward and repetitive. Better to state directly: 'Yes, bikes are popular' or 'I would like to say that bikes are popular.' Suggestion: avoid repeating 'yes' and use a complete clause to answer clearly.

× In my country there are a lot of uh, flat lands to ride, so it is enjoyable for bikers to ride in flat loads because it is less dangerous.

✓ In my country there are a lot of flat areas to ride, so it is enjoyable for bikers because it is less dangerous.

'Flat lands' is acceptable but 'flat areas' or 'flatland' is more natural. 'Flat loads' is incorrect; likely meant 'flat roads' or 'flat areas'. Repetition 'to ride' unnecessary. Use 'it is enjoyable for bikers' or 'bikers enjoy riding on flat roads.' Also 'it is less dangerous' is vague—'they are less dangerous' referring to flat roads. Suggestion: use correct noun ('roads' or 'areas'), avoid repetition, and ensure pronoun agreement if referring back to plural noun.