Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your tense consistent and give a brief specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then add one or two supporting details (e.g., what kind of bike, who gave it to you, or a memory). Use a linking word if you add extra information.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought me for my sixth birthday, and I used to ride it every afternoon around the neighborhood.

提案: Give a direct opinion and follow with specific reasons or examples, using linking words to connect ideas. Use plural agreement (bikes are) and avoid vague phrases. One or two supporting details are enough.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes and exercise; for example, in cities you can see dedicated bike lanes and many students cycling to school.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with past time marker 'when I was a child'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: use 'had' for possession in past (e.g., 'I had a bike when I was a child').

× Yes, I think it's quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country.

The student uses 'it's' (it is) to refer to 'bikes' which is plural; also original question asks about 'bikes' plural. Use present simple plural 'bicycles are' to match subject-verb agreement and clear reference. Suggestion: use plural noun and matching verb (e.g., 'bicycles are quite popular').