Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct vocabulary and reduce hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct the word choice (wheels, not wells), avoid filler words, and add one specific brief example to support your point. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use a linking word when adding the extra detail.

例: No, I didn't have a regular bike as a child. I had a tricycle with two extra wheels, which made it easy to keep my balance. However, when I tried a normal bike a few times, I found it difficult to stay steady, so I usually avoided it.

提案: Answer directly and reduce repetition and fillers. Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (for example: bike-sharing schemes, students commuting). Use linking words like 'for example' or 'especially' and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., 'bike-sharing bikes' or 'dockless bikes'). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, dockless bike-sharing schemes are common in cities, and many students and young professionals use them for short commutes.

× I didn't have a regular bike, but I do have a tricycle that has two extra wells beside it and, uh, it is so easy to keep my balance with these two extra wells.

✓ I didn't have a regular bike, but I did have a tricycle that had two extra wheels beside it, and it was so easy to keep my balance with those two extra wheels.

The student used inconsistent past vs present verbs and misused the noun 'wells' instead of 'wheels'. The context is childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense (did have -> did have or better 'I had'; 'do have' is present). Also 'has' should be 'had'. This falls under incorrect past participle/past form usage; correct by making verbs past ('did have' -> 'had' or keep 'did have' and make other verbs past) and correct the noun spelling. Suggestion: keep tense consistent (past) when talking about childhood and check common noun spellings like 'wheel'.

× And even though I tried riding a normal bike a few times, I find it quite difficult.

✓ And even though I tried riding a normal bike a few times, I found it quite difficult.

The clause refers to past attempts ('tried'), so the result should also be in the past ('found') to maintain tense consistency. Using present tense 'find' creates a tense mismatch. Suggestion: match the tense of result clauses to the time of the action when describing past experiences.

× Yes, umm, even though I didn't use it frequently, I, I, I see a lot of bikes all over the place, especially those, you know, sharing bikes on the streets that umm, everybody can use them.

✓ Yes, even though I didn't use them frequently, I saw a lot of bikes all over the place, especially those sharing bikes on the streets that everyone can use.

There are several issues: pronoun-number agreement and tense consistency. 'It' should be 'them' to match plural 'bikes' (pronoun error/number). Also, the student talks about general observation in the past context earlier ('didn't use'), so 'see' should be past 'saw' for consistency; however, if describing a current general situation, keep present but then 'didn't use' would contrast—better to use past for cohesive narrative. This correction addresses third person singular/plural usage and tense consistency. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and keep tense consistent across related clauses.

× So sure, I think it's popular, especially among young generations.

✓ So yes, I think it's popular, especially among the younger generation.

'Young generations' is awkward; more natural is 'the younger generation' or 'young people'. This is a pronoun/phrase choice issue and plurality. Use 'the younger generation' for the general group. Suggestion: use idiomatic expressions like 'young people' or 'the younger generation' for natural English.