Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), shorten and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Use past tense consistently for childhood, connect ideas with a linking word, and provide a specific detail (e.g., where or with whom you rode).

例: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. I loved riding it around my neighborhood on Sundays, often cycling to the park with my friends, which helped me relax and have fun.

提案: Make your opinion clear and consistent, fix confusing timeline and awkward phrasing, and add a specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to clarify contrast or change over time. Avoid vague phrases like 'the lovers.'

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. While India was not known for biking internationally in the past, in recent years interest has grown because of better roads and more affordable models. For example, many young people now use motorcycles and bicycles for daily commuting.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child because I loves to ride bike and personally I used to enjoy riding throughout the town on Sundays and which helps me to get relaxed.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child because I loved to ride it, and I used to enjoy riding around the town on Sundays, which helped me relax.

Mixing present and past tenses: the sentence refers to a past time ('when I was a child') so present tense 'do have' is incorrect; use past 'had'. 'Loves' is third person singular present but the subject is first person, so use past 'loved'. 'Ride bike' needs an article or pronoun: 'ride it' or 'ride a bike'. 'Throughout the town' is unnatural; use 'around the town'. The clause 'which helps me to get relaxed' should match past timeframe and be simplified to 'which helped me relax'. Also remove redundant 'personally'. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense when talking about past habits, match verb forms to the subject, include appropriate articles or pronouns, and use natural adverbial phrases.

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. As of now, India was not very famous for bikes. But in today's time, India is very famous for bikes and the lovers.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Until recently, India was not very known for bikes, but now India is very popular for bikes and for bike lovers.

Tense inconsistency and incorrect time expressions: 'As of now' conflicts with past statement 'was not very famous'; use 'until recently' to indicate a change from past to present. 'In today's time' is awkward; use 'now' or 'today'. 'Famous for bikes and the lovers' is ungrammatical and unclear; use 'popular for bikes and for bike lovers' or 'popular among bike lovers'. Suggestions: use clear time markers (until recently, now) to show change over time, avoid awkward phrases like 'in today's time', and use parallel and clear noun phrases ('bike lovers' rather than 'the lovers').