Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, verb tense and word choice; make the answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid filler words, and correct noun capitalization and agreement. Add one brief specific detail using a linking word (e.g., because/so) to enrich the response.

例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child. My older brother had one, so I often borrowed it and rode it around the neighborhood after school.

提案: Make the answer more structured and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear opinion, use linking words to explain reasons or comparisons, correct grammar (use plural/singular, articles), and provide one specific example or detail. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Although there are initiatives to promote cycling, most people still prefer cars for convenience; for example, unlike Germany where cycling infrastructure is widespread, our cities lack safe bike lanes.

× Actually I didn't, but my Big Brother had one and I always steal it from him and, uh, ride it.

✓ Actually I didn't, but my big brother had one and I always stole it from him and rode it.

Mixed past and present tense: the context is about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense. Also 'Big Brother' is not a title here and should be lowercase 'big brother'. Change 'steal' to past 'stole' and 'ride' to past 'rode' to keep consistent past narration. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when describing past habitual actions (e.g., 'I often stole it and rode it').

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country? Student: Actually no, but people are trying to make it popular but it's not popular and not like Germany that has lots of bike then the people that live in it.

✓ Actually no. People are trying to make biking popular, but it is not popular here, unlike Germany, which has lots of bikes and people who use them.

Multiple pronoun and reference issues: 'it' and 'bikes' mismatch and unclear references. 'Not like Germany that has lots of bike then the people that live in it' is ungrammatical and uses incorrect pronouns and relative clauses. Correct by using clear pronouns and relative clauses: 'unlike Germany, which has lots of bikes and people who use them.' Also adjust 'bike' to plural 'bikes' and 'people who use them' clarifies the relationship. Suggestion: Use consistent nouns and clear relative pronouns (which/that) and match singular/plural forms.