Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea ("afraid") and unnecessary filler. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., "injure myself" → "injure myself").

例: Not really. I didn’t have a bike because I was afraid of getting hurt when I fell. For example, once a friend fell from a bike and broke his arm, which made me too nervous to try.

提案: Begin with a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unrelated words ("bye Sir") and incorrect word choices ("pens" should be "buses" or similar; "children's" → "children"). Improve sentence structure and vocabulary accuracy.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country today. For example, many children ride them to school because it is convenient and cheap, and teenagers enjoy cycling with friends for exercise and socializing.

× Not really.

✓ Not really.

No grammatical error with tense here; sentence is a short response. No change needed.

× I was afraid of riding bikes because I was afraid that I might get hurt or break my leg or injured myself in any way.

✓ I was afraid of riding a bike because I thought I might get hurt, break my leg, or injure myself in some way.

The original sentence has redundant phrasing and mixed verb forms. Use singular 'a bike' for a general habit (Singular and plural issue) and keep verb forms parallel: 'get hurt, break my leg, or injure myself.' Replace 'I was afraid that I might' with 'I thought I might' to avoid repetition. Maintain past tense throughout.

× So yeah.

✓ So yes.

This is a discourse marker rather than a grammatical error; 'yeah' is informal. Replacing with 'yes' makes it more appropriate for a formal test response.

× Yeah, bye Sir.

✓ Yes, sir.

'Bye' is incorrect in this context and likely a mispronunciation of 'by' or filler. Use 'Yes, sir' to acknowledge the question formally. Capitalization of 'Sir' is not required.

× Very much popular in my country nowadays.

✓ Bicycles are very popular in my country nowadays.

The original lacks a clear subject and misuses 'very much' with 'popular.' Use a proper subject 'Bicycles' and the adjective 'popular' with the adverb 'very' to modify it. This fixes sentence structure and agreement.

× Children's prefer going to school by bikes and pens.

✓ Children prefer going to school by bike and by bus.

Original has incorrect possessive 'Children's' instead of plural noun 'Children' and 'pens' is incorrect likely for 'buses' or 'pedestrians.' Also use singular 'bike' as mode of transport and add 'by' before modes. Ensure correct word choice for 'buses' rather than 'pens.' If meaning was 'on foot', use 'walking'.

× Also let them, uh, drive their own bikes to school and they enjoy going with their friends.

✓ Also, they are allowed to ride their own bikes to school, and they enjoy going with their friends.

The phrase 'let them' is colloquial and missing a subject; passive or present simple 'they are allowed to' is clearer. Use 'ride' instead of 'drive' for bicycles. Keep tense consistent (present simple) and add conjunction punctuation for clarity.