Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, word choice and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, correct verb forms and nouns (e.g. 'had', 'parents', 'taught', 'patience', 'memories'). Keep it concise (2–3 sentences), add one specific detail and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents taught me to ride it, and I remember feeling thrilled the first time I rode without help because that lesson gave me confidence and many happy memories.

提案: Use clear present-tense statements and correct word choices. Start with a direct opinion, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'so', 'however'). Correct collocations: 'use public transport', 'own private cars', 'the climate is very hot'. Avoid vague phrasing.

例: To be frank, bikes are not very popular in Thailand. This is because many people use public transport or own private cars, and the hot climate makes cycling uncomfortable, especially during the midday heat.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about having a bike when you were a child (past time). Using present simple 'have' is incorrect; use past simple 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: match verb tense to the time reference (use 'had' for past situations).

× my parent torched me to ride it

✓ my parents taught me to ride it

The speaker means more than one parent, so 'parents' (plural) is needed. Also 'torched' is incorrect word choice; 'taught' is the correct past tense of 'teach'. Suggestion: use 'parents' and 'taught' for the past action of instruction.

× When I was a child my parent torched me to ride it and I remember being really excited the first time I rode without help.

✓ When I was a child my parents taught me to ride it, and I remember being really excited the first time I rode without any help.

Multiple issues: 'parent' should be plural 'parents'; 'torched' is a wrong verb form and meaning — 'taught' is correct past tense; adding 'any' before 'help' makes the phrase idiomatic. Suggestion: use past simple for past events and choose the correct verb 'teach/taught' and include 'any' for clarity.

× I'm very grateful for this patient because those lessons give me confidence and many memorable.

✓ I'm very grateful for their patience because those lessons gave me confidence and many memorable moments.

Several errors: 'this patient' is wrong; the intended noun is 'patience' and the pronoun should agree with 'parents' so 'their patience'. 'Give' should be past 'gave' to match past time. 'many memorable' is incomplete; 'memorable moments' is the correct noun phrase. Suggestion: use correct noun 'patience', match verb tense to past events, and provide a noun after 'memorable'.

× To be frank, I think in Thailand we didn't ride a bike, maybe because we use about the public transport and have an own of the public car.

✓ To be frank, I think in Thailand we don't ride bikes much, maybe because we use public transport and own private cars.

The original mixes past 'didn't' with a general present opinion. Use present simple 'don't' for habitual actions. 'Ride a bike' should be pluralized to 'ride bikes' or 'ride bikes much'. 'Use about the public transport' is incorrect; say 'use public transport'. 'Have an own of the public car' is ungrammatical; 'own private cars' conveys the idea. Suggestion: use present simple for general statements, correct prepositions, pluralize nouns appropriately, and use 'own' with the object directly.

× So and the reason why it's not popular in Thai, because the radio in Thai is so hot.

✓ The reason it's not popular in Thailand is that the weather in Thailand is very hot.

Multiple errors: 'So and the reason why' is redundant and ungrammatical—use 'The reason ... is that'. Use country name 'Thailand' not 'Thai'. 'Radio' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'weather'. Also use 'very' instead of 'so' for formality. Suggestion: simplify the conjunction structure, use correct nouns, and choose the appropriate linking word 'is that' for reasons.