Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Чётче формулируйте мысли, исправляйте грамматические ошибки и следите за последовательностью: начните с темы, добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения и завершите выводом. Избегайте лишних слов и неверных форм глаголов (например, «write» вместо «ride», «learned it» — неясно). Используйте связки (for example, then, after a few days) правильно и экономно.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandfather gave it to me for my birthday. At first I couldn't ride it, but after a few days of practice I learned to ride confidently. I rode it every weekend to visit friends.

提案: Исправьте грамматику и порядок слов, используйте точные выражения и приведите конкретные примеры или причины. Употребляйте согласованные формы (например, "have become", "young people"), добавляйте связки (for example, because, therefore) и конкретику (where, who).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. In recent years they have become especially common among young people because they are cheap and good for fitness. For example, in my city many students cycle to university and local authorities have built bike lanes to support them.

× Actually my grandfather gave me it for my birthday.

✓ Actually my grandfather gave it to me for my birthday.

The sentence has incorrect word order for the indirect object. In English, when both direct and indirect objects are present, the correct order is either 'gave me it' (informal, but often considered awkward) or better 'gave it to me'. Use 'gave it to me' for clarity and natural word order.

× For the first time I couldn't write it and after a few days I learned it successfully and then.

✓ At first I couldn't ride it, but after a few days I learned successfully.

The sentence uses 'for the first time' incorrectly and 'write' is a wrong verb; the intended verb is 'ride'. The conjunction and temporal phrases are awkward ('and then' is unnecessary). Use 'At first' for initial difficulty, use the correct verb 'ride', and link ideas with 'but' to show contrast.

× To some extent, yes.

✓ To some extent, yes.

This short answer is acceptable; no grammatical correction needed. It fits the present-tense question and requires no change.

× Nowadays bikes has been become popular among especially youngsters.

✓ Nowadays bikes have become especially popular among youngsters.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'bikes' is plural and requires the plural verb 'have' rather than 'has'. 'Has been become' is incorrect verb construction; use 'have become' or 'have been becoming'. Place 'especially' before 'popular' for natural word order and 'among youngsters' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× Every corner of the region we encounter people riding bicycle and it helps people to stay healthy and well.

✓ On every corner of the region we encounter people riding bicycles, and it helps people stay healthy.

Sentence structure and article errors: 'Every corner of the region' needs a preposition 'On'. 'Riding bicycle' requires plural 'bicycles' or 'a bicycle' with an article; 'riding bicycles' is natural. 'It helps people to stay healthy and well' is wordy; 'helps people stay healthy' is more natural. Removed redundant 'well' unless specifying 'well' as in 'feel well'.