Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitations and incorrect words (e.g. "boy" is wrong here). Use simple linking words like "and" or "so" to connect ideas. Keep your answer under five sentences and use correct tense (past simple) for childhood events.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it almost every day with my friends after school, and we often went to the nearby park to race. It was a small blue bicycle with a bell, which made those afternoons very fun.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then provide specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words such as "because", "however", or "so" correctly. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases like "transportations"—say "public transport" or "private cars". Keep to past/present tenses consistently.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because most people prefer private cars or public transport for convenience. However, you can still see many bicycles in city centers and near universities, where cycling is more common for short trips.

× Yes, yes, I uh, I have a boy.

✓ Yes, yes, I uh, I had a bike.

The student used the wrong noun and tense: 'have a boy' is irrelevant and incorrect for answering 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?'. The correct pronoun/noun and past tense should be used. Use 'had' (past tense) for something owned in childhood and 'bike' to match the question. Suggestion: replace the phrase with 'I had a bike' or 'I used to have a bike'.

× Well, when I was child and I always used my bike to have a fun with our friends, with my friends.

✓ Well, when I was a child I always used my bike to have fun with my friends.

Multiple errors: missing article before 'child' (needs 'a child') and incorrect phrase 'have a fun' (countable/uncountable issue). 'Fun' is uncountable here so no article; use 'have fun'. Also remove duplicate 'with our friends, with my friends' and keep 'with my friends' to be natural. Maintain past tense 'was' and 'used'.

× I think. No, because people usually use cars and transportations to go somewhere and you can you can see many bikes in the city.

✓ I don't think so, because people usually use cars and public transport to get around, and you can see many bikes in the city.

Several issues: the response 'I think. No,' is awkward — better 'I don't think so' to directly answer. 'Transportations' is incorrect plural; use 'transport' or 'public transport' (uncountable). 'To go somewhere' is less natural than 'to get around'. Also delete duplicate 'you can you can'. Keep present simple 'use' and 'can see' for general statements. Suggestion: use 'public transport' or 'public transportation' (uncountable) and avoid repeated words.