Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сфокусируйтесь на правильном употреблении времен и порядке слов; сократите повторения и сделайте ответ более естественным и связным. Укажите одно чёткое основное предложение, затем добавьте 1–2 поддерживающих предложения с подробностью (возраст, кто подарил, почему вам нравилось). Используйте прошедшее простое для описания прошлого опыта и свяжите идеи связками (for example, because, so).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it for my eighth birthday from my parents, and I used it every day to ride around the neighborhood. It was my first means of transport, so I remember it fondly.

提案: Исправьте грамматику (subject-verb agreement), уберите паузы и колебания («uh»), используйте более точную лексику и приведите конкретные примеры. Постройте одно основное предложение с мнением, затем одно-два поясняющих предложения с причинами и примерами, используя связки (for example, because, also).

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. Many people, including children and older adults, use them for short trips because they are cheap and convenient. For example, people often cycle to the market or to the bus stop, and bikes are also an environmentally friendly option.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence uses the present tense verb 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. In English, actions tied to a past time should use past tense. Use 'had' to match the past context. Suggestion: use past simple (had) for states or possession in the past.

× I have the bike when I was 8 years old, it's my gift for my birthday so I like it and this is my first transport for example.

✓ I had the bike when I was 8 years old; it was a gift for my birthday, so I liked it and it was my first means of transport, for example.

Multiple tense errors: 'have' should be past 'had' because of the past time reference; 'it's' should be past 'it was'; 'I like it' should be past 'I liked it'; 'this is my first transport' is awkward and should be 'it was my first means of transport'. Use past simple consistently for events in the past. Also use a semicolon or separate sentences to improve clarity.

× Yes, I do. I think bikes, uh, is popular in my country because uh, every people have bike, for example, child or old woman or old man, they use is minute transport and also it's very ecological transport.

✓ Yes, I do. I think bikes are popular in my country because many people have bikes; for example, children, older women, and older men use them as a convenient means of transport, and they are also very environmentally friendly.

Several errors: 'bikes is' should be 'bikes are' (subject-verb agreement); 'every people' is incorrect — use 'many people' or 'everyone'; 'have bike' needs plural 'have bikes'; 'child or old woman or old man' should be 'children, older women, and older men' for parallelism and correct forms; 'they use is minute transport' contains 'is' wrongly and 'minute' is wrong word — use 'convenient means of transport' or 'short-distance transport'; 'it's very ecological transport' should be 'they are very environmentally friendly' or 'it is very ecological' adjusted for plural. Suggestions: ensure subject and verb agree, use plural nouns when speaking generally, and choose appropriate adjectives (environmentally friendly).