Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tenses and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence in the past tense, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and keep the answer concise (max 5 sentences).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a purple bicycle that I rode around my neighborhood every afternoon. Because it was lightweight and comfortable, I often used it to visit friends and go to the park. I loved it for its colour and how free it made me feel.

提案: Use clearer grammar and more precise vocabulary; organise ideas with linking words. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific reasons or examples (e.g., bike-sharing schemes, infrastructure). Avoid small grammatical errors (articles, plural forms) and keep sentences varied but concise.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many cities have public bike‑sharing systems, so commuters can rent a bike near MRT stations and ride to work. In addition, there are dedicated bike lanes and parking spaces, which make cycling convenient and safe for many people.

× Yes, I have a bike when I was a child and it was a purple bike and I love it so much.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child; it was a purple bike and I loved it so much.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The student is talking about a past situation (childhood), so past tense should be used: 'have' -> 'had' and 'love' -> 'loved'. Also punctuation can improve clarity by separating clauses with a semicolon or period. Suggestion: keep all verbs describing past events in past tense to maintain tense consistency.

× Yes, definitely. We have a public rent bike for citizen.

✓ Yes, definitely. We have public bike rental services for citizens.

The original uses incorrect noun forms and word order: 'rent' should be a noun or part of a compound ('rental'), 'bike' should be plural if referring to a service, and 'citizen' should be plural or preceded by an article. Correct phrase is 'public bike rental services for citizens.' Suggestion: use 'rental' for the noun and pluralize when referring generally.

× We can easily travel by bike and we just have to take the MRT car and rent a bike.

✓ We can easily travel by bike; we just have to take the MRT and rent a bike.

'MRT car' is unnatural; 'MRT' or 'MRT train' is preferred. The original sentence is wordy and repeats 'bike.' Use a semicolon or conjunction to join clauses and remove unnecessary words. Also maintain consistent present tense 'can' and 'have to.' Suggestion: streamline to 'take the MRT and rent a bike.'

× It's really easy for people to use bike.

✓ It's really easy for people to use bikes.

Countable noun 'bike' needs plural form 'bikes' when speaking generally, or use the article 'a bike.' Also maintain present tense 'is' which is correct. Suggestion: say 'use bikes' or 'use a bike' depending on emphasis.