Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and grammar need correction, and some words are wrong (e.g., 'smart advice','training bills'). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and start with a clear topic sentence. Use linking words (first/then/because) and give one or two specific details (where you learned, who taught you, how often you rode). Avoid repetition. Improve sentence structure: correct past tense forms (had, used, learned) and article use.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. At first it had training wheels, and my father taught me to ride it in the park near our house. I used it often to visit friends and explore the neighborhood, so I felt very free and independent.

提案: Clarify ideas and remove filler words (uh). Provide one clear reason with a supporting detail. Use correct grammar and concise linking words (because, so, therefore). Avoid contradictory or unclear phrases ('people who are lower the low'). Mention a specific example or statistic if possible. Use consistent tense and reduce repetition.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people prefer them for short trips in towns and villages. Also, motorbikes are restricted for under‑18s, so teenagers often choose bikes to get to school or visit friends.

× Yes, I had a smart advice when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a smart bicycle when I was a child.

The word 'advice' is an uncountable noun meaning guidance, not a physical object. The student likely meant 'bike' or 'bicycle'. This is a vocabulary/word-choice error but also affects sentence structure. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bicycle' or 'bike' when referring to the object; use 'advice' only when referring to guidance.

× I it had training bills at 1st and I learned to ride it in the park near our house.

✓ It had training wheels at first, and I learned to ride it in the park near our house.

Original has extra pronoun 'I' and misspelled words 'bills' and '1st'. Correct structure places subject 'It' followed by verb 'had'. Use 'training wheels' (plural) and 'at first' as the correct phrase. Also join clauses with a comma and conjunction. Suggestion: remove redundant pronouns and use common phrases 'training wheels' and 'at first'.

× I use it a lot to visit my friends.

✓ I used it a lot to visit my friends.

The question refers to childhood (past time), so the verb should be in the past tense. 'Use' is present; change to 'used' to match temporal context. Suggestion: align verb tense with time expressions like 'when I was a child'.

× I remember feeling very free.

✓ I remember feeling very free.

This sentence is already correct. It correctly uses present tense 'remember' with the -ing form 'feeling' to describe a past feeling remembered. No change needed.

× Yes. I think bikes are quite popular in my country because when we go to shorter distance, usually people usually use bikes and the people who are lower the low because it is illegal to use motorbikes uh up before the age of 18.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because for short distances people usually use bikes. Also, younger people often use bicycles because it is illegal to ride motorbikes before the age of 18.

Multiple problems: tense and phrasing. 'When we go to shorter distance' is incorrect; use 'for short distances'. Remove duplicate 'usually'. 'The people who are lower the low' is unclear — intended meaning is 'younger people' or 'those below the legal age'. Use 'younger people' or 'younger riders'. 'It is illegal to use motorbikes up before the age of 18' is ungrammatical; correct to 'it is illegal to ride motorbikes before the age of 18.' Suggestion: simplify into two sentences, use 'short distances', remove repetition, and use 'younger people' and 'ride motorbikes'.

× So uh. So children usually use uh bikes.

✓ So children usually use bikes.

Fillers 'uh' are unnecessary in written answers; remove them. Also merge the two 'So' into one sentence. The verb 'use' is correct in present when speaking about general habit. Suggestion: remove filler words and duplicate connectors for clarity.