Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Используйте правильные времена и артикли, а также корректную структуру предложений. Начинайте с ясного тематического предложения, затем добавляйте одну-две поддерживающие детали с логическими связками. Исправьте грамматику: прошедшее время (had, was six years old, taught), статьи и порядок слов. Также избегайте лишних слов и повторов.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I was six years old when my dad taught me to ride it, and I remember feeling excited but a little scared at first. Because he was very patient, I learned quickly and soon enjoyed riding around the neighborhood.

提案: Дайте прямой ответ, затем добавьте конкретные причины и примеры с логическими связками. Исправьте грамматику и выбор слов: вместо «this is» используйте «they are» или «cycling is», используйте правильные относительные местоимения и избегайте повтора слов. Уточняйте, почему они популярны (удобство, здоровье, цена).

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and exercise. For example, I often see children and students cycling to school, and because bikes are cheap and easy to park, they are a practical choice in crowded cities.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The question asks about possession in the past ('when you were a child'), so present simple 'have' is incorrect; use past simple 'had'. Suggestion: match the verb tense to the time frame mentioned by the question.

× I was a six years old when my dad teach me to ride a bike.

✓ I was six years old when my dad taught me to ride a bike.

Errors: 'a six years old' is incorrect article and number agreement; we say 'six years old' without 'a'. 'teach' should be past tense 'taught' to match 'was' and the past time frame. Suggestion: use correct age expression and past simple for actions in the past.

× This is was so funny and of course I thought.

✓ It was so funny and, of course, I thought so.

Problems: 'This is was' mixes present and past auxiliary verbs; remove the extra verb and use past 'It was'. 'I thought' needs an object or 'so' to complete the idea. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and complete the thought by adding 'so' or specifying what you thought.

× Yes, I think this is popular because I saw many many children which ride the bike and this is fast to to move.

✓ Yes, I think they are popular because I saw many children who ride bikes and they are a fast way to get around.

Multiple issues: 'this is popular' refers to 'bikes' (plural) so use 'they are popular' (agreement). 'which ride the bike' should be 'who ride bikes' for people and plural noun. 'this is fast to to move' is ungrammatical; use 'they are a fast way to get around' to express purpose. Also remove duplicate 'to'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches referent, use 'who' for people, plural nouns for plural subjects, and use natural English expressions for speed/purpose.