Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, add one or two supporting details (when, what you liked about it), use a linking word and avoid vague phrasing like "the time with that." Keep it to fewer than five sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was eight and loved riding to the park with my friends because it made me feel free and independent. For example, I would spend hours practicing turns and racing on weekend afternoons.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and specific supporting details. Correct grammar (use present simple), avoid repetition and filler words, and give concrete examples or reasons (e.g., city cycling culture, scenery, health). Use linking words like "because" or "for example." Keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially in cities and tourist areas. For example, many people cycle to work or ride along lakesides because it is healthy and convenient. Also, local towns have good cycle paths, which encourages families to bike together on weekends.

× Yes, I used to have a bike and I really enjoyed the time with that.

✓ Yes, I used to have a bike and I really enjoyed the time I spent with it.

The student used 'the time with that' which is unclear and ungrammatical in this context. The verb tense 'used to have' is correct for past habitual action. The phrase should refer to 'time I spent with it' where 'it' correctly refers to the bike and 'spent' is the appropriate verb for time. Suggestion: replace vague noun phrases with a clear subject and verb: 'time I spent with it.'

× Oh, absolutely, yes. We're really enjoying Italy, going for a bike or actually go a walk.

✓ Oh, absolutely, yes. We really enjoy being in Italy, going for a bike ride or actually going for a walk.

The original mixes continuous 'We're really enjoying' with an unnatural phrase 'going for a bike' and incorrect verb form 'go a walk.' The question asks about general popularity, so simple present 'we really enjoy' is more appropriate. Use 'bike ride' as a noun phrase and 'going for a walk' with the gerund form. Suggestion: use simple present for habitual/general statements and correct collocations: 'bike ride' and 'going for a walk.'

× We are very active in actively in Italy.

✓ We are very active in Italy.

The sentence redundantly repeats 'active' and 'actively,' causing a sentence structure and adverb misuse error. 'Active' is an adjective modifying 'we,' so 'actively' is unnecessary. Suggestion: remove the redundant adverb and keep the adjective: 'We are very active in Italy.'

× So yeah, we have plenty of people going, always with a beautiful lake and stuff like that.

✓ So yeah, we have plenty of people cycling, often with beautiful lakes and things like that nearby.

The phrase 'have plenty of people going' is awkward; 'plenty of people cycling' or 'plenty of people go cycling' fits better. Also 'a beautiful lake' conflicts with 'plenty of people'—plural noun 'lakes' or rephrase to 'a beautiful lake nearby' for singular. The question is general, so simple present 'people go cycling' or present participle 'people cycling' is appropriate. Suggestion: choose consistent number agreement and clearer verb phrasing: 'plenty of people cycling, often with beautiful lakes nearby.'